Hi, Toke. I had a look through the updated draft and I think it addresses all the issues and editorials that i identified in my LC review. Adding the comments on the state diagram is probably OK. I won't push the idea of capitalising quantum etc. any further. In the light of Brian C's note and his exchange with Dave about labels, I think Dave might add a few words about using the label as a classification mechanism. I don't know if you have had any other comments - check with Martin whether he wants you to publish the updated version before the end of last call since it is the day of the IESG meeting. Thanks,Elwyn
Sent from Samsung tablet.-------- Original message --------From: Toke Høiland-Jørgensen <[email protected]> Date: 13/03/2016 12:19 (GMT+00:00) To: Elwyn Davies <[email protected]> Cc: General area reviewing team <[email protected]>, [email protected] Subject: Re: Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-aqm-fq-codel-05 Hi Elwyn I have now been through your comments and produced an updated version of the draft. It is available from here: https://kau.toke.dk/ietf/draft-ietf-aqm-fq-codel-06.html (or .txt if you prefer). Most of your comments I have just incorporated (variants of), with a single stylistic exception as noted below. I *think* I managed to cover everything, but I did this in two sittings, so something may have slipped through the cracks, I suppose. Let me know if that is the case. I believe Dave has replied to most of your other comments, so I won't go through them again unless you point out something I missed. For the full diff (of the source document), see here: https://github.com/dtaht/bufferbloat-rfcs/commit/0d7f1963cc27d11129bcb5fe2affb90ebc6e67d3 Cheers, -Toke Elwyn Davies <[email protected]> writes: > General: It would be helpful to capitalize Quantum throughout (or at > least from s3 onwards) to emphasise that it is a configured value. > Likewise Interval and Target parameters. Maybe also Flow and Queue as > they a defined terms. I think this is the only stylistic change I haven't made. I thought it made it more difficult to read, not less.
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