This looks very good! In the last paragraph, I might reword it as "You can interact with and manipulate mathematical objects through the powerful notebook interface."
Also, what does it look like if you left-justify the smaller text? - Robert On Oct 22, 2008, at 3:13 PM, David Joyner wrote: > This looks beautiful. It looks fine to me. Some grammatical ideas: > (a) I think you can say "open source" instead of "open-source, even > though > what you have is correct. > (b) Possibly "Python based" should be Python-based". > (c) "Numerous methods ..." Could be worded "Use the numerous > software packages > included to explore and solve them." Or something like that. > Great job though Harald! > > On Wed, Oct 22, 2008 at 6:01 PM, Harald Schilly > <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: >> >> Hi all, as those who attended SD10 already know, I was working on an >> advertisement for Sage. Before it gets actually printed (on real >> paper), I want to collect some feedback, especially since I've never >> done such a thing before... What bothers me most is the text, please >> do proofreading or suggest new sentences. >> for everything else: http://sage.math.washington.edu/home/schilly/ad/ >> >> harald >> >>> >> > > > --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ To post to this group, send email to sage-devel@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/sage-devel URLs: http://www.sagemath.org -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
