This looks beautiful. It looks fine to me. Some grammatical ideas: (a) I think you can say "open source" instead of "open-source, even though what you have is correct. (b) Possibly "Python based" should be Python-based". (c) "Numerous methods ..." Could be worded "Use the numerous software packages included to explore and solve them." Or something like that. Great job though Harald!
On Wed, Oct 22, 2008 at 6:01 PM, Harald Schilly <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > Hi all, as those who attended SD10 already know, I was working on an > advertisement for Sage. Before it gets actually printed (on real > paper), I want to collect some feedback, especially since I've never > done such a thing before... What bothers me most is the text, please > do proofreading or suggest new sentences. > for everything else: http://sage.math.washington.edu/home/schilly/ad/ > > harald > > > > --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ To post to this group, send email to sage-devel@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/sage-devel URLs: http://www.sagemath.org -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
