On 2/2/08 5:26 PM, "Kurt Kroon" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > On 1/26/08 9:28 PM, "Graham Percival" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > >> Final call for comments on NR 1.1 Pitches. Please note that this >> is our "demonstration" chapter, which will form the guidelines for >> the rest of the NR. So if there's anything that you don't like >> about the general layout and policies of this section, please >> speak up now, before the entire NR is changed to match. >> >> Read it online, download the pdf, print it out and read on a bus with a >> red pen in hand... please review it any way that suits you. :) I'll >> wait a week before declaring this section "perfect". >
More observations -- where appropriate, I've indicated my changes in [square brackets]: Generally -- "which" and "that" have specific uses that we aren't observing very well. "That" introduces a restrictive subclause and should not be preceded by a comma. Removing this clause changes the meaning of the sentence, usually by making it more general. On the other hand, "which" introduces an informative (but non-restrictive) subclause and should be preceded by a comma. I replaced which with that below (and in my preceding email) where the following clause was restrictive and couldn't be removed without generalizing the meaning of the sentence. And here's the continued list of my specific observations --- Page 9, antepenultimate paragraph (missed this in my first go-round) -- "For example, when entering music that [not which] begins on a notated E (concert D) [moved this section up] for a B-flat trumpet, one could write ..." Page 12 -- the list of predefined clefs is not very systematic. I suggest putting them in this order, which is based on putting middle C on the next higher line: Clef name Position of middle C french 2 ledger lines below the staff treble 1 ledger line below the staff soprano bottom staff line mezzosoprano second staff line alto third staff line tenor fourth staff line baritone fifth staff line (C clef) varbaritone fifth staff line (F clef) bass 1 ledger line above the staff subbass 2 ledger lines above the staff percussion N/A tab N/A The preceding example could be rewritten to show this visually: \clef french c2 c \clef treble c2 c \clef soprano c2 c \clef mezzosoprano c2 c \clef alto c2 c \clef tenor c2 c \clef baritone c2 c \clef varbaritone c2 c \clef bass c2 c \clef subbass c2 c Same page, first sentence of the second paragraph in "Selected snippets" -- delete the comma after octavation: "or the octavation does not in ..." Ditto, third sentence -- change litotes to a positive statement (unless the litotes is incorrect and the sentence should be negative): "The clefOctavation value would normally be set to 7, -7, 15 or -15, but other values are valid." Page 13 -- "end of the previous line is [not in] not required ..." Page 14 -- Unlike the clefs, the order of the modes is systematic, but based on a descending scale. If you accept my suggestion of clefs above, please consider ordering the modes in ascending sequence as well, namely: Ionian, Dorian, Phrygian, Lydian, Mixolydian, Aeolian, Locrian. Page 16 -- last line "so an instrument that [not which] produces a real sound ..." Page 18, under "Automatic accidentals" -- "LilyPond provides a function to specify which [delete such because it's awkward] accidental style ...." Same page, same section, next paragraph -- "Optionally, the function can take a second argument that [not which] determines in which ..." Page 20, second section of "modern" section -- "It prints the same accidentals as default, with two exceptions that [not which] serve to ..." Page 22, "Selected snippets" -- "... every pitch in the twelve-tone [removed extra space, changed note to tone] scale ..." Page 23, "Ambitus", second sentence in second paragraph -- "... two note heads that represent the lowest and highest [less awkward than minimum and maximum] pitches." Okey dokey, that's enough for now. Kurt _______________________________________________ lilypond-user mailing list lilypond-user@gnu.org http://lists.gnu.org/mailman/listinfo/lilypond-user
