Hi, Justin B Rye <justin.byam....@gmail.com> wrote: > (In en/appendix/chroot-install.xml:) > - If you have a &releasename; &debian-gnu; CD mounted at > + If you have a &releasename; &debian-gnu; installation medium mounted at > <filename>/cdrom</filename>, you could substitute a file URL instead > of the http URL: <userinput>file:/cdrom/debian/</userinput> > > In English, "a medium" means a *category* of information-propagating > mechanism (such as radio or print), not one individual USB thumbdrive > or whatever. That would have to be an "item of media" or similar; but > then again isn't it also true to say that the *image* is mounted on > the /cdrom mountpoint? > > In en/boot-installer/parameters.xml: > By default, before rebooting, &d-i; automatically ejects the optical > media used during the installation. This can be unnecessary if the system > - does not automatically boot off the CD. In some cases it may even be > + does not automatically boot off such disc. In some cases it may even be > undesirable, for example if the optical drive cannot reinsert the media > itself and the user is not there to do it manually. Many slot loading, > slim-line, and caddy style drives cannot reload media automatically. > > "Such" plus singular doesn't work like that in English. Here I'd > rephrase it as just "if the system will not automatically boot off > it", but in other cases you need "such a...". "Such media" is okay, > though! > > (in en/boot-installer/trouble.xml:) > - Configure network: [ ] > - Detect CD: > - Load installer modules: [ ] > [...] > + Configure network: [ ] > + Detect installation medium: [ ] > + Load installer modules: [ ] > > I'd recommend just "Detect media:" - after all, the question is > whether it *ever* succeeded on *any* try, right?
Yes. > (in en/boot-installer/x86.xml:) > - obtain CD-ROM/DVD-ROM<phrase condition="bootable-usb"> or USB memory > - stick</phrase> installation media as described in > + obtain installation media as described in > <xref linkend="official-cdrom"/><phrase condition="bootable-usb"> > respective > <xref linkend="boot-usb-files"/></phrase> or > > Not a flaw in your patch, but that use of "respective" is horribly > ungrammatical in English... it's hard to tell what it *should* be here > without more context, but usually the answer is either "or" or > nothing. > > (en/howto/installation-howto.xml:) > Now sit back while debian-installer detects some of your hardware, and > - loads the rest of itself from CD, USB, etc. > + loads the rest of itself from the installation medium. > > "Medium" is the wrong thing, "item of media" would be very clunky, and > we can't get away with plural "media" because you can't sit back if > you're swapping discs, so this is a tricky one. Maybe it could say: > > loads the rest of the installation image. > > (en/install-methods/official-cdrom.xml:) > - By far the easiest way to install &debian-gnu; is from an Official > - &debian; CD/DVD-ROM Set. You can buy a set from a vendor (see the > + By far the easiest way to install &debian-gnu; is from a set of official > + &debian; installation images. You can buy a set of CD/DVD from a vendor > (see the > > A new and different number-agreement glitch: "set of CDs/DVDs". > > [...] > - detailed instructions). If you have a &debian; CD/DVD set and CDs/DVDs are > + detailed instructions). If you have such optical installation media and > those media are > bootable on your machine<phrase arch="x86">, which is the case on all > > "Such" works here, but "those media" is a bit wobbly. I'd shorten it to > > detailed instructions). If you have such optical installation media, and > they are > > [...] > - If you don't have a CD set, then you will need to download the > + If you don't have a installation media set, then you will need to download > the > > A nice easy-to-fix one here: that's *an* installation media set. I applied everything as you suggested, thanks for the quick review! Holger > I was planning to carry on and find all the other places where fixes > are needed, but I'll have to come back to it. -- Holger Wansing <hwans...@mailbox.org> PGP-Fingerprint: 496A C6E8 1442 4B34 8508 3529 59F1 87CA 156E B076
