On 4/25/17 8:20 AM, Brian Haberman wrote:
Hi Paul,
On 4/22/17 3:23 PM, Paul Kyzivat wrote:
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Document: draft-bchv-rfc6890bis-06
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2017-04-22
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-10
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-25
Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should
be fixed before publication.
General Comments:
This version is *much* easier to understand than the -04 version that I
previously reviewed.
Issues:
Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 1
(1) Nit:
In section 2.3 the requested handling of footnotes is confusing.
IIUC, the intent is:
- add a new footnote between the existing [1] and [2];
- add a new footnote at the end after the existing [5];
- renumber the footnotes sequentially (from [1] to [7]);
- adjust all the existing footnote references to refer to the same
footnote as previously, but using the new numbering;
- then, add references to the new footnotes [2] and [7] to the entries
for TEREDO and Unique-Local.
It took me a few readings of the current text to convince myself that is
what you intended. It would be better to be more explicit about it.
Your understanding is correct. To help the reader, I have added the
following to the beginning of 2.3:
The following changes to the IPv6 Special-Purpose Address Registry
involves the insertion of two new footnotes. These changes require the
footnotes to be re-numbered.
Does that help explain the changes in a clearer manner?
Yes. And since it is essentially a one-time thing and IANA will confirm
the changes with the authors I see no need to wordsmith it.
Thanks,
Paul
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