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Document: draft-bchv-rfc6890bis-06
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2017-04-22
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-10
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-25
Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should
be fixed before publication.
General Comments:
This version is *much* easier to understand than the -04 version that I
previously reviewed.
Issues:
Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 1
(1) Nit:
In section 2.3 the requested handling of footnotes is confusing.
IIUC, the intent is:
- add a new footnote between the existing [1] and [2];
- add a new footnote at the end after the existing [5];
- renumber the footnotes sequentially (from [1] to [7]);
- adjust all the existing footnote references to refer to the same
footnote as previously, but using the new numbering;
- then, add references to the new footnotes [2] and [7] to the entries
for TEREDO and Unique-Local.
It took me a few readings of the current text to convince myself that is
what you intended. It would be better to be more explicit about it.
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