Hi Paul, On 4/22/17 3:23 PM, Paul Kyzivat wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the > IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document > shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more > information, please see the FAQ at < > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-bchv-rfc6890bis-06 > Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat > Review Date: 2017-04-22 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-10 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-25 > > Summary: > > This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should > be fixed before publication. > > General Comments: > > This version is *much* easier to understand than the -04 version that I > previously reviewed. > > Issues: > > Major: 0 > Minor: 0 > Nits: 1 > > (1) Nit: > > In section 2.3 the requested handling of footnotes is confusing. > IIUC, the intent is: > > - add a new footnote between the existing [1] and [2]; > > - add a new footnote at the end after the existing [5]; > > - renumber the footnotes sequentially (from [1] to [7]); > > - adjust all the existing footnote references to refer to the same > footnote as previously, but using the new numbering; > > - then, add references to the new footnotes [2] and [7] to the entries > for TEREDO and Unique-Local. > > It took me a few readings of the current text to convince myself that is > what you intended. It would be better to be more explicit about it.
Your understanding is correct. To help the reader, I have added the following to the beginning of 2.3: The following changes to the IPv6 Special-Purpose Address Registry involves the insertion of two new footnotes. These changes require the footnotes to be re-numbered. Does that help explain the changes in a clearer manner? Regards, Brian
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