Hi Alice, The final edits look good to me too.
Thanks! Albert From: jh...@juniper.net At: 04/03/25 16:45:32 UTC-4:00To: aru...@staff.rfc-editor.org Cc: Albert Fu (BLOOMBERG/ 120 PARK ) , bfd-...@ietf.org, bfd-cha...@ietf.org, res...@yahoo.com, evyn...@cisco.com, auth48archive@rfc-editor.org, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9764 <draft-ietf-bfd-large-packets-16> for your review Alice, The final edits look fine. Albert should acknowledge hopefully shortly. -- Jeff On 4/3/25, 16:16, "Alice Russo" <aru...@staff.rfc-editor.org <mailto:aru...@staff.rfc-editor.org>> wrote: [External Email. Be cautious of content] Jeff, Thank you for your reply. The revised files are here (please refresh): https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.html__;!! NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6 EtIocw4PQXx8rXN0ye4$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.html_ _;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkq YNR6EtIocw4PQXx8rXN0ye4$> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.txt__;!!N Et6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6E tIocw4PQXx8ld74nYQ$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.txt__ ;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqY NR6EtIocw4PQXx8ld74nYQ$> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.pdf__;!!N Et6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6E tIocw4PQXx8UWzdF5Q$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.pdf__ ;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqY NR6EtIocw4PQXx8UWzdF5Q$> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.xml__;!!N Et6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6E tIocw4PQXx8arNm9m8$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764.xml__ ;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqY NR6EtIocw4PQXx8arNm9m8$> This diff file shows all changes from the approved I-D: https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-diff.html __;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifk qYNR6EtIocw4PQXx89x3-o34$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-diff. html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYD rifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx89x3-o34$> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-rfcdiff.h tml__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDr ifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx89cQdl4I$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-rfcdi ff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmg WYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx89cQdl4I$> (side by side) This diff file shows the changes made during AUTH48 thus far: https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth48dif f.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgW YDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8sPrGfhQ$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth4 8diff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5z DmgWYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8sPrGfhQ$> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth48rfc diff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zD mgWYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8vkLb_s0$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth4 8rfcdiff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qT J5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8vkLb_s0$> (side by side) This diff file shows only the changes since the last posted version: https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-lastrfcdi ff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmg WYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8lVSg7FA$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-lastr fcdiff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5 zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw4PQXx8lVSg7FA$> We will wait to hear from you again and from your coauthors before continuing the publication process. This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document: https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9764__;!!NEt6yM aO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6EtIocw 4PQXx8iBjY93c$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9764__;!!NE t6yMaO-gk!FzaeaQWcKusjfl28vMTSN9JwSaLG5fArOi_gKOPeNnRBbfi0qTJ5zDmgWYDrifkqYNR6Et Iocw4PQXx8iBjY93c$> Thank you. RFC Editor/ar Juniper Business Use Only > On Apr 3, 2025, at 6:25 AM, Jeff Haas <jh...@juniper.net <mailto:jh...@juniper.net>> wrote: > > Alice, > >> This diff file shows the changes made during AUTH48 thus far: >> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth48dif f.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!DulRqW5N_GWlzu33Fmtfm45VVwyWnf--B3I530cGoqDy5GC_m8mpNAUqw 53KwGOTWAkA2hX2Fe29g63r7I_AK7Y$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth4 8diff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!DulRqW5N_GWlzu33Fmtfm45VVwyWnf--B3I530cGoqDy5GC_m8mpN AUqw53KwGOTWAkA2hX2Fe29g63r7I_AK7Y$> <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth4 8diff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!DulRqW5N_GWlzu33Fmtfm45VVwyWnf--B3I530cGoqDy5GC_m8mpN AUqw53KwGOTWAkA2hX2Fe29g63r7I_AK7Y$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9764-auth4 8diff.html__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!DulRqW5N_GWlzu33Fmtfm45VVwyWnf--B3I530cGoqDy5GC_m8mpN AUqw53KwGOTWAkA2hX2Fe29g63r7I_AK7Y$>> > > The interdiff here looks fine, thanks. > >> Re: 4) Section 4.5, where "The above text" refers to the entire section, per your reply. This sentence has not been been updated. Please consider whether it would be more precise as follows. >> >> Orig: The above text also applies to most, if not all, BFD techniques. >> Perhaps: This section applies to most, if not all, BFD techniques. > > The perhaps text is fine. > >> Re: 7) Security Considerations, you replied: >>> The deviation was intentional, but perhaps may be better served by preserving >>> the original boilerplate while adding on the additional clarification sentence. >> >> >> We have not updated the document; please provide the new text. > > Proposed text: > > : Modules that use the groupings that are defined in this document > : should identify the corresponding security considerations. For > : example, reusing some of these groupings will expose privacy-related > : information (e.g., 'node-example'). This module defines one such grouping, > : "bfd-large-common", which contains the "pdu-size" data node whose security > : considerations are documented above. > > The takes the boilerplate section you noted and appends the sentence that > explains what, in this module, is applicable. > > ------ > > One further comment, Albert points out that the two instances of "1500" > In the text should be "1512" for consistency with the example earlier > In the document. > > -- Jeff > > > Juniper Business Use Only
-- auth48archive mailing list -- auth48archive@rfc-editor.org To unsubscribe send an email to auth48archive-le...@rfc-editor.org
