I haven't read through this entire thing yet, but I will, leaving comments as I
go. I haven't looked at anyone else's comments yet either, so forgive me if I
cover something someone else has already mentioned.
The only problem I see with this right off the bat is that G. has already made
a draft proposal dealing with land in a different way (see DIS: SimAgora 2000).
These two proposals would probably
On 11/14/2017 12:17 AM, Reuben Staley wrote:
I'm done with a very, very rough draft of this proposal. Tell me how you all
think it looks.
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Title: "Putting Agora on a Map"
AI: 2
Author: Trigon
Co-Authors:
The square brackets are not proposal text and all that jazz.
[ PART I: Removing and Changing Stuff ]
Repeal rules 2488, 2489, 2490, and 2491.
[ I honestly tried to keep the estates, but these changes are so radical
that it wouldn't be compatible. ]
Amend rule 2500 by replacing "2" with "6".
Replace all instances of "1 Action Point" with "3 Action Points" in the
order they appear.
In a specific rule, or in all rules? If it's in a specific rule, you should
specify that rule; if it's all rules, I believe you still need to specify all
rules it appears in (that may not be true, however)
[ Unlike most reforms, I want to keep AP around, mostly because the 2003
version had "Action Units" which were a similar concept. I reworked it
though, so here you go. ]
[PART II: Making Land]
Re-enact rule 1993/1 (Power=2) "The Land of Arcadia" with the text:
Arcadia is a land entirely defined by the Arcadian Map (the Map).
The Map is a record kept by the Office of the Cartographor.
Just saying it is "a record" seems a bit broad. I don't know how you would make
that more specific without being over-complicated, though.
The Map divides Arcadia into a finite, discrete number of Units of
Land, or simply Land. Each Unit of Land is an indestructible asset
specified by a pair of integers known as its Latitude and
Longitude.
Every unique pair of integers within the limits defined in the
Rules for Latitude and Longitude signifies an existent Unit of
Land. No other Units of Land exist. Units of Land SHALL only be
created or destroyed by changing the limits of Latitude and
Longitude defined in the Rules.
Not sure SHALL is what you want here, maybe "can only be ... Any other way is
INEFFECTIVE"?
All values for Latitude and Longitude MUST lie between -9 and +9,
inclusive.
The Total Land Area of Arcadia is the number of existent Units of
Land defined by permissible Latitude and Longitude pairs.
Re-enact rule 1994/0 (Power=2) "Ownership of Land" with the text:
Any existent Land for which ownership has not been explicitly
changed belongs to Agora.
Land belonging to Agora is called Public Land. Land belonging to
a contract is called Communal Land. Land belonging to any other
entity is called Private Land. Together, Communal Land and Private
Land are called Proprietary Land.
Changes in Land ownership are secured, unless:
1. The Land Unit is Public, and the transfer is specifically
permitted by the rules;
2. The Land Unit is Communal, and the transfer is specifically
permitted by the Contract that owns it;
3. The Land Unit is Private, and the entity that owns it announces
the transfer.
Re-enact rule 1995/0 (Power=2) "Land Types" with the text:
Each Unit of Land SHALL have a single Land Type. Changes to Land
Type are secured.
Again, don't think you want SHALL here. That makes it possible but ILLEGAL for it to have
more than one Land Type. I think "Each Unit of Land has a single Land Type"
works just fine.
The phrase "Units of X", where X is a Land Type defined by the
Rules, is considered a synonym for "Units of Land that have Land
Type (or Subtype) X"
When existent Land has not had its Type changed as explicitly
permitted by the Rules, or has a Type that is not currently
defined by the Rules, it is considered to have the Land Type of
Aether. Rules to the contrary nonwithstanding, Units of Aether
CANNOT be transferred from Agora, or owned by any entity other
than Agora. If Private or Public Land becomes Aether, the
Cartographor SHALL transfer it to Agora in a timely fashion.
When an act specifies an alternating Land Type, the Land Type
chosen will be based upon the Land Type used as the previous
alternating Land Type, so that consecutive alternating Land Types
alternate between Black and White. In a timely fashion after a
Player notifies the Cartographor of an act that specifies an
alternating Land Type, the Cartographor MUST announce which Land
Type was used for that act.>
Re-enact rule 1996/3 (Power=1), renaming it to "The Cartographor" with
the text:
The Cartographor is an office; its holder is recordkeepor for the
Land of Arcadia.
The Cartographor's Weekly Report shall include:
1. the ownership and land type of all existing land;
2. all changes in the ownership and land type of existing land
since the most recent report; and
3. the location for the previous week and the current week of each
entity or instrument with a defined location.
[ I renamed this from "Mapkeepor" to "Cartographor" because that's not a
good name for a thing. Yes, I know that the Cartographor existed
before as part of a different system, but it's unlikely
Unlikely what?
Re-enact rule 1997/2 (Power=1), renaming it to "Defined Land Types" with
the text:
In addition to Aether, the Land types Black and White are defined.
Re-enact rule 1998/2 (Power=1) "Land Topology" with the text:
Two Units of Land are Adjacent if they have the same Latitude, and
their Longitudes differ by exactly one; or they have the same
Longitude, and their Latitudes differ by exactly one.
The Penguin Distance between two given Units of Land is the
minimum number of Single Waddles required to Travel from one of
the given Units to the other given Unit, where one Single Waddle
is the Penguin Distance required to Travel from one Unit of Land
to an Adjacent Unit of Land.
You're using Penguin Distance in the definition of Penguin Distance, which is a
little confusing.
Two Units of Land are said to be Connected by a specific Type of
Land if it is possible to travel from the first Unit to the second
by Waddling only over Land of that specific Type.
Re-enact rule 1999/0 (Power=1) "Entity Location" with the text:
Every Player SHALL each have a single defined Location
corresponding to a single Latitude, Longitude pair.
No other Entity SHALL have a location unless it is defined in
other Rules. Changes to the Location of an Entity are secured. If
an Entity is specified by this Rule as having a defined Location,
but its Location has not been explicity set or changed, its
Location SHALL be set to (0, 0).
Again, SHALL is not what you want here. (I've made this same mistake before;
don't feel bad.)
Re-enact rule 2003/11 (Power=1) "Actions in Arcadia" with the text:
Players CAN expend:
1. 1 AP to move from one Land Unit to an adjacent Unit if their
Land Types are the same and the destination is not Aether;
2. 2 AP to move from one Land Unit to an adjacent Unit if their
Land Types differ and the destination is not Aether;
3. 2 AP to set Land Type of a Land Unit which e owns to any Land
Type other than Aether, whether or not e is located at that
Land Unit.
4. 3 AP to set the Land Type of a random Land Unit that is
adjacent to the Entity's current location, is of type Aether,
and is owned by Agora, to an alternating Land Type. The
Cartographor SHALL make the random determination. In a timely
fashion after a Player notifies the Cartographor of this move,
the Cartographor SHALL announce which Land Unit, if any, is
changed by this action. This action has no effect if there are
no qualifying Land Units.
This time you do want SHALL, but I think you should change it to "CAN and
SHALL".
5. 4 AP to set the Land Type of eir current location to any Land
Type of eir choice other than Aether, if and only if the Unit
is owned by Agora.
6. 6 AP to set the Land Type of any Land Unit that is of type
Aether to an alternating Land Type.
Re-enact rule 2004/3 (Power=1) "Land Auctions" with the text:
Every Agoran Week, if the number of units of Private Land is less
than one half the total number of units of Land, an auction SHALL
be initiated. For this auction, the announcer is the Cartographor,
the auctioneer is the Cartographor, the lots are chosen as such:
1. if there exist at least 3 Units of non-Aether Land in the
possession of Agora: any 3 such Units of Land, to be chosen by
the Cartographor;
2. if there exist fewer than 3 Units of non-Aether Land in the
possession of Agora: all such Units;
and the minimum bid is 1 shiny.
Re-enact rule 2022/5 (Power=1), renaming it "Land Transfiguration" with
the text:
On the fifteenth of each Agoran Month, the Cartographor SHALL
perform the following actions in sequence, and report these
changes in a timely fashion:
again, CAN and SHALL
1. Every Land Unit, excluding (0, 0) that is not directly
connected to a unit of Aether, or is not connected by its own
type to a unit of Aether, shall be transformed to Aether.
2. Any entities whose locations are on land units so transformed
shall have their locations set to 0,0.
3. If any land unit so transformed is not property of Agora, it
becomes property of Agora.
So, all land has to be connected to Aether or it gets zapped up by Agora? I
don't entirely understand the reasoning behind this.
[PART III: Creating Jafitah]
Create a new rule (Power=2) "Jafitah" with the text:
[ Turns out G. made eir own proposal and had "Plats", which was too
close to the "Plots" that I made. Therefore, in order to make things
less confusing, I used the Sajem Tan word for "Land" instead. ]
Jafitah (pronounced /jæfitɑ/, singular "jafit") are liquid assets
tracked by the Cartographor.
In order to create a plot, the player who wishes to create it
SHALL specify one or more Land Units that are all connected by a
single Type that the plot is to be composed of. These land units
are considered the jafit's constituents.
A player CAN create or destroy a plot by announcement by spending
3 AP or 5 sh.
You probably want this before the previous paragraph, and you should maybe
change 5 sh. to some fraction of the FV.
If one or more units of land that make up a jafit ever have their
ownership or Land Type changed, then:
1. If the change would cause the constituent Land Units to cease
to be connected, then the jafit is destroyed;
2. otherwise, the plot is resized to exclude the Land Unit in
question.
[ This needs to be worded better. Suggest fixes please. Thanks in
advance. ]
This doesn't look too bad to me, I'll let someone else suggest more fixes.
Create a new rule (Power=2) "Zmetah" with the text:
[ Okay, I'm just gonna call everything by Sajem Tan names because why
not. This one means "building" btw. ]
I don't even know what Sajem Tan is. :P
Zmetah (pronounced /zmetɑ/, singular "zmet") are liquid assets
tracked by the Cartographor. In order for a zmet to exist, it MUST
be built on a jafit. Only one zmet is allowed per jafit.
A player CAN create a zmet by announcement by paying specifying
which jafit e wants to build it on, specifying which type of zmet
e intends to build, and paying the corresponding build cost.
I think the first instance of the word "paying" in this paragraph might be a
typo?
If a player owns a zmet, e CAN, by announcement, use any powers
the zmet affords to em.
If a player owns any zmetah with upkeep costs, e SHALL pay them
before the first day of the next Agoran month. Failing to do this
destroys the zmet. In the second to last week of the Agoran Month,
the Cartographor SHALL issue a humiliating public reminder to all
those who have not paid upkeep fees on any of eir zmetah.
Yay for using humiliating public reminders in more than one place in the rule.
Create a new rule (Power=2) "Zmet Types" with the text:
The following Zmet types are defined, along with all relevant
statistics:
1. Estate
- Build Cost: 10sh.
- Upkeep Cost: 10sh.
- Powers: The owner of an estate CAN choose to raise eir
voting power by one on up to X proposals, where X is the Nth
triangular number, where N is the amount of Land Units the
jafit which the estate is built on has.
[ I hope that's clear so that someone can fix it lol. But seriously this
sucks. ]
2. Quarry
- Build Cost: 5sh.
- Upkeep Cost: 5sh.
- Powers:
[ Depending on what economic reform proposal passes, Quarries will
either create shinies in the owner's possession, or it will do
something else related to shinies.
Also, I need more ideas for this section. Overall though, I think
that this conveys the ideas I had in mind. Critique away! ]Okay, here are my
ideas for this:
I like the idea of Estates giving votes. However, the way it's currently
worded, I think people with land might eventually overpower those without, and
they would barely have a voice.
Maybe rename Quarries to Mines and have them create shinies.
You could also go with what several other proposals have done and add Zmetah
that add assets/currencies for calling CFJs and pending proposals, or tie these
in with currencies like that created by other proposals.
