Abstract: and greatly enhancing -> and greatly enhance Near bottom of page 3: of all (of all...
Bottom of p3: comma missing between references 1st para, p4: part of general case -> part of the general case 2nd para, p4: For the simple Lie groups (...) naturally break up into :: doesn't make sense 3rd para, p4: examples of the classical groups from which the inductive arguments leading to general cases... :: is awkward 4th para, p4: For the computation -> For, the computation :: actually it's not good practice to start a sentence with "for" 4th para, p4: incredibly huge :: awkward 4th para, p4: Indeed the object to be computed.... :: tense changes in this sentence a few times 2nd para, p5: will anyway provide :: awkward 3rd para, p5: used compute 2nd para, p6: this lead us -> this led us 3rd para, p7: halfplane -> half plane A general comment on the section on modular forms (after the description of what a modular form is). It starts off with some general hyperbole about the importance of modular forms and the link to L-series and leaves the reader unsure what the project is. Then it mentions the general impact that modular forms have on mathematics in very general terms. Then it lists specific computations which will be done (this section is very good by the way) . But I would personally start by making a very clear statement that the project is for the computation of modular forms and describe what you mean by "computing" them. Mention what computations have already been done and why they are insufficient. Then you should mention the impact of past work, e.g. the Emerton example, then mention the applications. I would also hint very early on that these important computations have quite some substance, by giving an abbreviated list of explicit computations that will be performed, a teaser if you like. That way instead of starting with very general information, you immediately mention that the proposal is for very specific important computations. 2nd para, p9: compute as much as possible about :: far too general 3rd para, p9: remove "e.g.", it makes it sound like you don't have a specific plan of attack, and that is clearly not the case 5th para, p9: did you intend to ask a question or to make a statement, it seems that "is it" should be, "it is". The statement about the impact of the degree 2 field computation is weak. I would say something like, "we hope to pave the way for future collaborations with researchers in blah, blah, blah. The data we compute will be used for blah, blah, blah." para 4, p 11: space before comma Low amounts of symmetry -> Cases bearing fewer symmetries :: passim The physics proposal starts off with a description of the physics, which leads into the description of various problems, which leads subtly into the mention of an algorithm, then a statement about how the machines will be used. The proposal needs a clear definite statement at some point before it mentions "the algorithm" of what the proposal is specifically for. I think the addition of a single sentence or paragraph, breaking the flow of thought, will be sufficient for this. The statement about the bottleneck in the labeling algorithm is worrying given that you are asking for multi-core machines. I would make a statement about the fact that a supercomputer is not a valid solution to this problem because the problem is not easily parallelised. Rather the computation should be run in parallel with other computations on a machine with few nodes, but very fast processors, such as the one you are asking for. Likewise the statement about the algorithm to generate the codes is worrying. para 6, p 14: have created the currently most efficient methods :: awkward para 7, page 14: solve vaguely given problems ?? para 7, page 14: for example the recent problem.... :: sentence doesn't make grammatical sense Good luck! It looks like a very exciting proposal and I can't imagine someone sanely rejecting it. Bill. On 11 Jan, 01:47, "William Stein" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Hi, > > The Screms proposal is now completely done, but it's possible for me > to make some last minute minor > typo fixes tomorrow morning. I've posted the latest version here: > http://wstein.org/grants/screms/ > > If you notice _any_ typos or mistakes at all, definitely let me know. > The proposal is supposed > to be perfect right now. > > -- william > > -- > William Stein > Associate Professor of Mathematics > University of Washingtonhttp://wstein.org --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ To post to this group, send email to sage-devel@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/sage-devel URLs: http://sage.scipy.org/sage/ and http://modular.math.washington.edu/sage/ -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
