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Document: draft-tschofenig-eap-ikev2-15
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 02 Oct 2007
IESG Telechat date: 04 Oct 2007
Summary: (light review) Ready for publication as Experimental minus nits
Comments:
I have checked the document for basic readability, nits, and
references. I have not tried to put the actual protocol described in
my head, leaving that for more qualified experts. At that level, I
found the document fairly clear for the amount of mechanism being
defined. I verified internal reference consistency and section
references into the normative requirements.
Nits:
The 2119 language isn't boilerplate.
Reference 6 (to 3629) is not used.
Section 8.8 first sentence should probably start "The Certificate
Request payload"
I understand there is some discussion already in progress on the IANA
considerations section. I haven't seen the details of that
discussion. If the following nit comments still make sense after that
discussion concludes, consider
* suggesting a registry name
* (very trivial nit) last full paragraph on page 32 - change "outline
in [9]" to "outlined in [9]". (If the polices are stated in this
document, pointing at [9] seems a little redundant - if there's stuff
in [9] that's missing here, then it's probably not an informative
reference)
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