Excellent. Well, why wait - made those changes, found a couple of typos and did a little hard formatting to let it breath a bit more on the second page.
Both of the drop box files are updated. Barring any other requests, will call that done. On Thu, Jan 17, 2013 at 1:24 PM, Rob Weir <robw...@apache.org> wrote: > On Thu, Jan 17, 2013 at 1:07 PM, Drew Jensen <drewjensen.in...@gmail.com> > wrote: > > I updated the font (ubuntu) all the way around. > > Rewrote the last column of second page, ehh to be honest. > > > > - still not the first two paragraphs though - any thoughts on what you > want > > to say there. > > Or other comments > > > > Some quick comments. > > 1 -- the first paragraph is really weak. "Subsequent to a transfer of > rights...." "Hence"? A bit bureaucratic. Why not just take our > standard opening, from the "Why OpenOffice?" Page: > > "Apache OpenOffice is the leading open-source office software suite > for word processing, spreadsheets, presentations, graphics, databases > and more. It is available in many languages and works on all common > computers. It stores all your data in an international open standard > format and can also read and write files from other common office > software packages. It can be downloaded and used completely free of > charge for any purpose." > > We should be promoting the product, not giving free history lessons. > > 2 -- The trademark acknowledgement in the footer is wrong. For > example, the feather logo is not being used at all. And we're claiming > a trademark on "Apache OpenOffice" not on "OpenOffice". > > So better would be something like this: > > "Apache OpenOffice is a trademark of The Apache Software Foundation. > OpenOffice.org and the seagull logo are registered trademarks of The > Apache Software Foundation." > > 3 -- the "Can I participate?" section sends users to the users mailing > list. Is that what we want. I would have thought sending them to the > dev list would be better. Or even better: Link to > http://openoffice.apache.org/get-involved.html which will get them to > the right information faster. > > 4 --On back side -- It should be Open Document Format with a space and > capital 'F' (two places). > > Otherwise this looks great -- thanks, Drew! > > Regards, > > -Rob > > > updated odt and a pdf as it is now at > > > > https://www.dropbox.com/s/aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.odt > > https://www.dropbox.com/s/xx62g6knl2s44ce/AOO%20Flyer.pdf > > > > Otherwise, will come back to this later today. > > > > One other thing, this isn't really what I would call a FOSDEM piece IMO.. > > but more on that later. > > > > //drew > > > > > > On Wed, Jan 16, 2013 at 8:11 PM, Andrea Pescetti <pesce...@apache.org > >wrote: > > > >> On 16/01/2013 Drew Jensen wrote: > >> > >>> OK, well I made a couple more small edits and pushed it to dropbox > >>> https://www.dropbox.com/s/**aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.**odt< > https://www.dropbox.com/s/aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.odt> > >>> > >> > >> Thanks, looks very nice! I uploaded it to > >> https://cwiki.apache.org/**confluence/display/OOOUSERS/** > >> FOSDEM+2013+Organization< > https://cwiki.apache.org/confluence/display/OOOUSERS/FOSDEM+2013+Organization > > > >> > >> There will be a couple tweaks to apply (including replacement of the > Comic > >> Sans font, which is known to be very unpopular among geeks) but this > flyer > >> will be very useful at FOSDEM and hopefully elsewhere. > >> > >> Regards, > >> Andrea. > >> >
