On Thu, Jan 17, 2013 at 1:07 PM, Drew Jensen <drewjensen.in...@gmail.com> wrote: > I updated the font (ubuntu) all the way around. > Rewrote the last column of second page, ehh to be honest. > > - still not the first two paragraphs though - any thoughts on what you want > to say there. > Or other comments >
Some quick comments. 1 -- the first paragraph is really weak. "Subsequent to a transfer of rights...." "Hence"? A bit bureaucratic. Why not just take our standard opening, from the "Why OpenOffice?" Page: "Apache OpenOffice is the leading open-source office software suite for word processing, spreadsheets, presentations, graphics, databases and more. It is available in many languages and works on all common computers. It stores all your data in an international open standard format and can also read and write files from other common office software packages. It can be downloaded and used completely free of charge for any purpose." We should be promoting the product, not giving free history lessons. 2 -- The trademark acknowledgement in the footer is wrong. For example, the feather logo is not being used at all. And we're claiming a trademark on "Apache OpenOffice" not on "OpenOffice". So better would be something like this: "Apache OpenOffice is a trademark of The Apache Software Foundation. OpenOffice.org and the seagull logo are registered trademarks of The Apache Software Foundation." 3 -- the "Can I participate?" section sends users to the users mailing list. Is that what we want. I would have thought sending them to the dev list would be better. Or even better: Link to http://openoffice.apache.org/get-involved.html which will get them to the right information faster. 4 --On back side -- It should be Open Document Format with a space and capital 'F' (two places). Otherwise this looks great -- thanks, Drew! Regards, -Rob > updated odt and a pdf as it is now at > > https://www.dropbox.com/s/aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.odt > https://www.dropbox.com/s/xx62g6knl2s44ce/AOO%20Flyer.pdf > > Otherwise, will come back to this later today. > > One other thing, this isn't really what I would call a FOSDEM piece IMO.. > but more on that later. > > //drew > > > On Wed, Jan 16, 2013 at 8:11 PM, Andrea Pescetti <pesce...@apache.org>wrote: > >> On 16/01/2013 Drew Jensen wrote: >> >>> OK, well I made a couple more small edits and pushed it to dropbox >>> https://www.dropbox.com/s/**aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.**odt<https://www.dropbox.com/s/aef3a6fz44yrwft/AOO%20Flyer.odt> >>> >> >> Thanks, looks very nice! I uploaded it to >> https://cwiki.apache.org/**confluence/display/OOOUSERS/** >> FOSDEM+2013+Organization<https://cwiki.apache.org/confluence/display/OOOUSERS/FOSDEM+2013+Organization> >> >> There will be a couple tweaks to apply (including replacement of the Comic >> Sans font, which is known to be very unpopular among geeks) but this flyer >> will be very useful at FOSDEM and hopefully elsewhere. >> >> Regards, >> Andrea. >>
