Hi Ana, Quoting Ana Custura (2016-03-05 20:23:36) > Hi all, > > On 05/03/16 14:01, Jonas Smedegaard wrote: > >>> Of course, the information can be rephrased and moved if one wants >>> to put less emphasis on it (for more emphasis elsewhere). For >>> instance, we could add something like "Debian Pure Blends are >>> developed, distributed and supported fully within Debian" at the end >>> of the current "first paragraph". >> >> That sounds like a nice improvement to me. > > With regards to the second paragraph that was removed, 'forks' is not > a concept most end users will be familiar with,
Then how about "not deriving away from Debian" instead - is that a common and familiar concept/expression in english? > but the idea that blends are entirely contained within Debian is > important. I think that changes focus: Discussing whether the piece you hold in your hand and am interested in is contaminated or not is different from discussing how a lot of pieces (only a fraction of which you as a user have a direct interest in) are all uncontaminated. > I suggest we add a second paragraph: > > > "Debian Pure Blends are developed, distributed and supported fully > within Debian. Therefore, if you obtain a complete > Debian distribution, you have all available Debian Pure Blends > available for installation." > > How does this sound? To me that sounds less relevant for me - as a potential user of a blend: It talks about how all blends are in Debian, rather than (as the original text) each individual blend - e.g. the one specific blend I am interested in. - Jonas -- * Jonas Smedegaard - idealist & Internet-arkitekt * Tlf.: +45 40843136 Website: http://dr.jones.dk/ [x] quote me freely [ ] ask before reusing [ ] keep private
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