Hi Alice, all,
The changes look good. Thanks.
> Re: Section 3.4
> >> Re: #6 (Section 3.4), no update has been made. To clarify, the
> >> question is: should "Destination Options header" be "Destination
> >> Options headers" in this list? (The question was not about the
> word
> >> "Options".)
> > Ah.
> > No need to change: "Destination Options header" is right
>
>
> Benoit confirmed it's singular, so "a" has been added ("a Destination
> Options header), to be parallel with the other items in the list (all
> preceded by "a"). However, it is slightly odd with the plural
> "headers" in the bullet points that follow (e.g. "the occurrences of
> the Destination Options headers").
I understand this might be odd, but Benoît is correct is here. I suggest to
leave the current text. Thank you.
Cheers,
Med
> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Alice Russo <aru...@staff.rfc-editor.org>
> Envoyé : mardi 25 février 2025 23:53
> À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucad...@orange.com>
> Cc : benoit.cla...@huawei.com; opsawg-...@ietf.org; opsawg-
> cha...@ietf.org; thomas.g...@swisscom.com; Mahesh Jethanandani
> <mjethanand...@gmail.com>; auth48archive@rfc-ed <auth48archive@rfc-
> editor.org>; RFC Editor <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org>
> Objet : Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9740 <draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh-
> 18> for your review
>
>
> Med,
>
> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the document accordingly.
>
> Re: Section 6.2.2
> > . I agree with the change in the first para of S6.2.2. However,
> please note that the OLD text was echoing the content at
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> iana.org%2Fassignments%2Ftcp-parameters%2Ftcp-parameters.xhtml%23tcp-
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> &sdata=ldZx1vKYr8UrVh37xZm77eOwR86UmnsHTtDikJMKoZ8%3D&reserved=0. It
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>
> Thank you for pointing this out. I have CCed you on mail to IANA re:
> cap 'C' in one existing description ("Shared Memory Communications
> over RDMA protocol").
>
>
> Re: Section 3.4
> >> Re: #6 (Section 3.4), no update has been made. To clarify, the
> >> question is: should "Destination Options header" be "Destination
> >> Options headers" in this list? (The question was not about the
> word
> >> "Options".)
> > Ah.
> > No need to change: "Destination Options header" is right
>
>
> Benoit confirmed it's singular, so "a" has been added ("a Destination
> Options header), to be parallel with the other items in the list (all
> preceded by "a"). However, it is slightly odd with the plural
> "headers" in the bullet points that follow (e.g. "the occurrences of
> the Destination Options headers").
>
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>
> > On Feb 24, 2025, at 8:09 AM, mohamed.boucad...@orange.com wrote:
> >
> > Hi Alice, all,
> >
> > For Item #7 (Section 4.1), Option A works for me as well.
> >
> > Please find below two comments about the edited version:
> >
> > . Title: s/Extensions Headers/Extension Headers
> > . I agree with the change in the first para of S6.2.2. However,
> please note that the OLD text was echoing the content
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> It is worth to report this to IANA.
> >
> > Other than that, and assuming the above changes are implemented, I
> approve the publication of this document.
> >
> > Many thanks for all your efforts.
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Med
> >
> > De : Benoit Claise <benoit.claise=40huawei....@dmarc.ietf.org>
> > Envoyé : jeudi 20 février 2025 09:54
> > À : Alice Russo <aru...@staff.rfc-editor.org> Cc : BOUCADAIR Mohamed
> > INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucad...@orange.com>; opsawg-...@ietf.org;
> > opsawg-cha...@ietf.org; thomas.g...@swisscom.com; Mahesh
> Jethanandani
> > <mjethanand...@gmail.com>; auth48archive@rfc-ed
> > <auth48archive@rfc-editor.org>; RFC Editor
> > <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org>; me <benoit.cla...@huawei.com> Objet :
> Re:
> > AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9740 <draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh-18> for
> your
> > review
> >
> >
> > Hi Alice,
> >
> > On 2/19/2025 11:41 PM, Alice Russo wrote:
> > Benoit,
> >
> > Thank you for replying to the questions. The document has been
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> > Re: #3 (Section 1.1), we added the bulleted item; please review. (We
> > are assuming the reply "Yes" was about adding the bulleted item,
> rather than removing the sentence.) Indeed.
> >
> >
> >
> > Re: #6 (Section 3.4), no update has been made. To clarify, the
> > question is: should "Destination Options header" be "Destination
> Options headers" in this list? (The question was not about the word
> "Options".) Ah.
> > No need to change: "Destination Options header" is right
> >
> >
> >
> > Re: #7 (Section 4.1), we await word from Med.
> >
> > Re: #10 (Table 3), no updates have been made, as perhaps the
> capitalization intentionally matches RFC 5102. Specifically, we see
> "Routing header", "Fragment header - first fragment", and "Fragment
> header - not first fragment" in RFC 5102. Please let us know if there
> are descriptions that you want to change.
> > We're good.
> >
> > Thanks for your work.
> >
> > Regards, Benoit
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > We will wait to hear from you again and from your coauthors before
> > continuing the publication process. This page shows the AUTH48
> status
> > of your document:
> >
> >
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> > rfc-
> editor.org%2Fauth48%2Frfc9740&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40o
> >
> range.com%7C8a38c930f3fa4ea2a4ab08dd55ef27aa%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b92
> >
> 53b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C638761208143653262%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB
> >
> 0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsI
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> > VHHJh60Egc%3D&reserved=0
> >
> > Thank you.
> > RFC Editor/ar
> >
> > On Feb 18, 2025, at 2:59 AM, Benoit Claise
> <benoit.claise=40huawei....@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
> >
> > Dear IANA,
> >
> > I reviewed
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> rfc-editor.org%2Fauthors%2Frfc9740-
> rfcdiff.html&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7C8a38c930f
> 3fa4ea2a4ab08dd55ef27aa%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C6
> 38761208143660865%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlYi
> OiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjoyfQ%3D%3D%7C0%7
> C%7C%7C&sdata=priwNI%2FFVgPtoqQ0nHrqiI%2Fe5nIVgutql61zUUD0F6A%3D&reser
> ved=0 and all changes look good.
> >
> > On 2/18/2025 1:00 AM, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org wrote:
> > Authors,
> >
> > While reviewing this document during AUTH48 (
> >
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> > rfc-
> editor.org%2Fauthors%2Frfc9740.html&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucada
> >
> ir%40orange.com%7C8a38c930f3fa4ea2a4ab08dd55ef27aa%7C90c7a20af34b40bfb
> >
> c48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C638761208143668391%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8e
> >
> yJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWF
> >
> pbCIsIldUIjoyfQ%3D%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=YoXxqG9HYZRwHpoQyx6w5hSSopYV8
> > 8ZLVN5gDpgrqzg%3D&reserved=0 and other formats), please resolve the
> > following questions, which are also in the XML file.
> >
> > 1) <!--[rfced] May the title be updated for readability as follows
> or otherwise?
> >
> > Original:
> > Extended TCP Options and IPv6 Extension Headers IPFIX Information
> > Elements
> >
> > Perhaps:
> > New IPFIX Information Elements for TCP Options and IPv6 Extensions
> > Headers
> > -->
> >
> > That works for me.
> >
> >
> > 2) <!--[rfced] FYI, this sentence has been rephrased to avoid the
> > dangling "IEs" at the end of the sentence. Please review. (One
> hyphen
> > is actually two hyphens within the document.)
> >
> > Original:
> > This document specifies new IP Flow Information Export (IPFIX)
> > [RFC7011] Information Elements (IEs) to solve a set of issues
> > encountered with the specifications of ipv6ExtensionHeaders (to
> > export IPv6 extension headers) and tcpOptions (to export TCP
> options)
> > IEs [IANA-IPFIX].
> >
> > Current:
> > This document specifies new IP Flow Information Export (IPFIX)
> > [RFC7011] Information Elements (IEs) to solve a set of issues
> > encountered with the specifications of two IEs -
> > ipv6ExtensionHeaders (to export IPv6 extension headers) and
> > tcpOptions (to export TCP options) [IANA-IPFIX].
> > -->
> >
> > Good improvement
> >
> >
> > 3) <!--[rfced] Please clarify the last sentence of this list item.
> It
> > seems similar to the first sentence; should it be removed? If it's
> not
> > the same (perhaps this was intended to distinguish between "specify"
> > and "discuss"), should it be a separate bullet point?
> >
> > Original:
> > The specification of the ipv6ExtensionHeaders IPFIX IE (64) does
> not:
> >
> > [...]
> > * Specify whether the exported values match the full enclosed
> values
> > or only up to a limit imposed by hardware or software (e.g.,
> > Section 1.1 of [RFC8883]). Note that some implementations may
> not
> > be able to export all observed extension headers in a Flow
> because
> > of a hardware or software limit (see, e.g.,
> > [I-D.ietf-6man-eh-limits]). The specification of the
> > ipv6ExtensionHeaders IE does not discuss whether it covers all
> > enclosed extension headers or only up to a limit.
> >
> > Perhaps:
> > The specification of the ipv6ExtensionHeaders IPFIX IE (64) does
> not:
> >
> > [...]
> > * Specify whether the exported values match the full enclosed
> values
> > or only up to a limit imposed by hardware or software (e.g.,
> > Section 1.1 of [RFC8883]). Note that some implementations may
> not
> > be able to export all observed extension headers in a Flow
> because
> > of a hardware or software limit (see, e.g., [EH-LIMITS]).
> >
> > * Discuss whether it covers all enclosed extension headers or
> only
> > up to a limit.
> > -->
> >
> > Yes.
> >
> >
> > 4) <!--[rfced] May this be rephrased for conciseness and
> readability?
> > In particular, "aggregate extension headers length" reads oddly.
> >
> > Original:
> > * Specify how to report extension header chains or aggregate
> > extension headers length.
> >
> > Perhaps:
> > * Specify how to report chains or aggregate lengths of
> > extension headers.
> >
> > Or (because "extension header chain" is a defined term):
> > * Specify how to report extension header chains or
> > aggregate lengths of extension headers.
> >
> > This one above (extension header chain is a defined term)
> > -->
> >
> >
> > 5) <!--[rfced] Regarding this defined term, may we change "chain" to
> "chains"?
> > It reads oddly as singular.
> >
> > Original:
> > Flow with varying extension header chain: Refers to a Flow where
> > distinct extension header chains are observed.
> >
> > Suggested:
> > Flow with varying extension header chains: Refers to a Flow
> where
> > distinct extension header chains are observed.
> >
> > Yes.
> >
> >
> > Examples of usage are below. [This is not a comprehensive list.]
> >
> > Original (Section 3.3):
> > Extension headers observed in a Flow with varying extension
> header
> > chain MUST NOT be grouped ...
> >
> > Suggested:
> > Extension headers observed in a Flow with varying extension
> header
> > chains MUST NOT be grouped ...
> >
> > yes.
> >
> >
> > Original (Section 3.6):
> > Each header chain length of a Flow with varying extension header
> > chain MUST be exported in a separate
> > ipv6ExtensionHeadersChainLength IE.
> >
> > Suggested:
> > Each header chain length of a Flow with varying extension header
> > chains MUST be exported in a separate
> > ipv6ExtensionHeadersChainLength IE.
> > -->
> >
> > Yes
> >
> >
> > 6) <!--[rfced] Should "Desination Options header" be plural here?
> >
> > Yes. See
> >
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> > iana.org%2Fassignments%2Fipv6-parameters%2Fipv6-
> parameters.xhtml&data=
> >
> 05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7C8a38c930f3fa4ea2a4ab08dd55e
> >
> f27aa%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C638761208143676161%
> >
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> > FDdnz5zhras7P82rrnHCHoxL3egT6IkBHgu%2Fa2M%3D&reserved=0
> >
> > 60 Destination Options for IPv6 [RFC8200]
> > And
> >
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> > rfc-editor.org%2Frfc%2Frfc8200.html%23section-
> 4.6&data=05%7C02%7Cmoham
> >
> ed.boucadair%40orange.com%7C8a38c930f3fa4ea2a4ab08dd55ef27aa%7C90c7a20
> >
> af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C638761208143683941%7CUnknown%7CTWF
> >
> pbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsI
> >
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> > nJ1hZLKLEwITLq5YkPYIk67c%3D&reserved=0
> > We ask because the other headers are preceded by "a"
> > and because of plural usage in the bulleted list that follows.
> >
> > Original:
> > For example, if an IPv6
> > packet of a Flow includes a Hop-by-Hop Options header, a
> > Destination Options header, a Fragment header, and Destination
> > Options header, the ipv6ExtensionHeaderTypeCountList IE will
> > report:
> >
> > Perhaps:
> > For example, if an IPv6
> > packet of a Flow includes a Hop-by-Hop Options header, a
> > Destination Options header, a Fragment header, and Destination
> > Options headers, the ipv6ExtensionHeaderTypeCountList IE will
> > report:
> > -->
> >
> >
> > 7) <!--[rfced] Is the word "flags" necessary here? The phrase "the
> > shared TCP options flags" reads oddly and does not appear elsewhere
> in
> > this document. We note "TCP options flags" has appeared in zero
> RFCs,
> > and this document uses "a shared TCP option (Kind=253 or 254) in a
> > Flow" in Sections 4.2 and 4.3.
> >
> >
> > Background info
> > - TCP_FLAGS appears in RFC 3954
> > - It became tcpControlBits in RFC5102 and IANA
> >
> >
> > Original:
> > In order to optimize the use
> > of the reduced-size encoding in the presence of
> > tcpSharedOptionExID16List or tcpSharedOptionExID32List IEs,
> the
> > Exporter MUST NOT set to 1 the shared TCP options (Kind=253 or
> > 254) flags of the tcpOptionsFull IE that is reported for the
> same
> > Flow.
> >
> > Option A (if removing "flags"):
> > In order to optimize the use
> > of the reduced-size encoding in the presence of
> > tcpSharedOptionExID16List or tcpSharedOptionExID32List IEs,
> the
> > Exporter MUST NOT set to 1 the shared TCP options (Kind=253 or
> > 254) of the tcpOptionsFull IE that is reported for the same
> Flow.
> >
> > Option B (perhaps rephrase to retain "flags"):
> > In order to optimize the use
> > of the reduced-size encoding in the presence of
> > tcpSharedOptionExID16List or tcpSharedOptionExID32List IEs,
> the
> > Exporter MUST NOT set to 1 the flags of the shared TCP options
> (Kind=253
> > or 254) of the tcpOptionsFull IE that is reported for the same
> Flow.
> > -->
> >
> > I believe I am fine with Option A but I would like to get Med's
> opinion here.
> >
> >
> > 8) <!--[rfced] Regarding the figure titles, may the ordinal numbers
> be
> > removed as follows? The reason for "First Example" on Figure 1 is
> > unclear. Also, we suggest removing the article ("A" / "An") for
> > conciseness and to match the title of Figure 7.
> >
> > Original:
> > Figure 1: A First Example of EH/Bit Mappings in the
> > ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE Figure 2: A First Example of
> > ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE with Reduced-size Encoding Figure 3: A
> > Second Example of ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE with Reduced-size
> > Encoding Figure 4: An Example of ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE
> Reported
> > for an Extension Header Chain Figure 5: An Example of TCP Options /
> > Bit Mappings in a tcpOptionsFull IE Figure 6: An Example of
> > tcpOptionsFull IE with Reduced-size Encdoing
> >
> > Perhaps:
> > Figure 1: Example of EH/Bit Mappings in the ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull
> > IE Figure 2: Example A of ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE with
> > Reduced-Size Encoding Figure 3: Example B of
> ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull
> > IE with Reduced-Size Encoding Figure 4: Example of
> > ipv6ExtensionHeadersFull IE Reported for an Extension Header Chain
> > Figure 5: Example of TCP Options / Bit Mappings in a tcpOptionsFull
> IE
> > Figure 6: Example of tcpOptionsFull IE with Reduced-Size Encoding
> > -->
> >
> > Ok.
> >
> > 9) <!--[rfced] Section 8.2: FYI, the name in the I-D and the IANA
> > registry did not match ("Type" missing in the I-D). We have updated
> > this document to match the IANA registry (and to match Section 3.1).
> > Please let us know if that is not what you intended.
> >
> > Original: ipv6ExtensionHeader
> > Updated: ipv6ExtensionHeaderType
> >
> > (to match 513 ipv6ExtensionHeaderType on
> >
> >
> https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.
> >
> iana.org%2Fassignments%2Fipfix&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40oran
> >
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> > and Section 3.1)
> > -->
> >
> > good catch.
> >
> >
> > 10) <!--[rfced] For the Descriptions in Table 3, would you like to
> > make the capitalization more consistent or leave as is? Title case
> is
> > used for some items; initial-word capitalization is used for others.
> > (If there are any changes, then we will ask IANA to update the
> > registry accordingly.)
> >
> > For examples:
> > Routing header (5) vs. Mobility Header (7)
> >
> > Destination Options for IPv6 (0) vs.
> > Fragmentation header - first fragment (4)
> > -->
> >
> > Yes for consistency.
> >
> > Many thanks for your work.
> >
> > Regards, Benoit
> >
> >
> > 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of
> the
> > online Style Guide
> >
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> > and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this nature
> > typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for
> readers.
> >
> > Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this
> > should still be reviewed as a best practice.
> > -->
> >
> >
> > Thank you.
> >
> > RFC Editor/ar
> >
> >
> > On Feb 17, 2025,
> > rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org
> > wrote:
> >
> > *****IMPORTANT*****
> >
> > Updated 2025/02/17
> >
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