Hi Sandy, I think that you captured the intent. Thanks.
Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : Sandy Ginoza <sgin...@staff.rfc-editor.org> > Envoyé : jeudi 20 février 2025 00:05 > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucad...@orange.com> > Cc : Paolo Lucente <pa...@ntt.net>; RFC Editor <rfc-editor@rfc- > editor.org>; John Scudder <j...@juniper.net>; grow-...@ietf.org; > grow-cha...@ietf.org; j...@sobornost.net; Warren Kumari > <war...@kumari.net>; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > Objet : Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9736 <draft-ietf-grow-bmp-peer-up- > 05> for your review > > > Hi Med, > > We have updated the document as described below. > > For this one, please review the update closely, as I am not sure > I understood the desired update. > > > (3) S3.2 No explicit mention of the IANA registry in the > description of the info type. > > > > CURRENT: Information Type (2 bytes): defined types are: > > It currently reads as follows: > > * Information Type (2 bytes): types are as defined in the > "BMP Peer > Up Message TLVs" registry: > > 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(side by side) > > > Please review and let us know if any further updates are needed > or if you approve the RFC for publication. > > Thank you, > RFC Editor/sg > > > > > > > On Feb 11, 2025, at 10:08 PM, mohamed.boucad...@orange.com > wrote: > > > > Hi all, > > > > > > > > Some few comments about the edited version, fwiw: > > > > > > > > (1) S.1 Expand at first use > > > > > > > > CURRENT > > > > [RFC7854] defines a number of different BMP message types. > With > > the > > > > ^^^^ > > > > exception of the Route Monitoring message type, these > messages are > > > > TLV-structured. Most message types have distinct namespaces > and > > IANA > > > > registries. However, the namespace of the Peer Up message > overlaps > > > > that of the Initiation message. As the BGP Monitoring > Protocol has > > > > > ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ > > > > > > > > NEW: > > > > [RFC7854] defines a number of different BGP Monitoring > Protocol (BMP) message types. With the > > exception of the Route Monitoring message type, these > messages are > > TLV-structured. Most message types have distinct namespaces > and IANA > > registries. However, the namespace of the Peer Up message > overlaps > > that of the Initiation message. As BMP has > > > > > > (2) S3.1 nit > > > > > > > > CURRENT: provided for here for completeness > > > > NEW: provided for completeness > > > > > > > > (3) S3.2 No explicit mention of the IANA registry in the > description of the info type. > > > > > > > > CURRENT: Information Type (2 bytes): defined types are: > > > > > > Cheers, > > > > Med > > > > > > > > De : Sandy Ginoza <sgin...@staff.rfc-editor.org> Envoyé : > mercredi 12 > > février 2025 00:52 À : Paolo Lucente <pa...@ntt.net> Cc : RFC > Editor > > <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org>; John Scudder <j...@juniper.net>; > > grow-...@ietf.org; grow-cha...@ietf.org; j...@fastly.com; Warren > Kumari > > <war...@kumari.net>; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org Objet : Re: > AUTH48: > > RFC-to-be 9736 <draft-ietf-grow-bmp-peer-up-05> for your review > > > > > > > > > > Hi Paolo, > > > > > > > > Thank you for your reply. We have updated the document as > described below. In particular, thank you for your explanation > regarding 3a and 3d. > > > > > > > > > > > > Regarding item 6, please verify that this is correct, as it's > different from what I see in Section 4.4 of RFC 7854. > > > > > > > > > > > > 6) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that the bit ruler appears as > expected. > > Typically the numbers appear over the hyphens. Compare the > alignment > > with the figure in Section 4.4 of RFC 7854 > <https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F% > 2Fwww.rfc-editor.org%2Frfc%2Frfc7854.html%23section- > 4.4&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7Caf7fe6848cf14 > d2f7c6808dd5139ff39%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C > 638756032026655751%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydW > UsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjoyfQ% > 3D%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=KeKb3KsRrdx4WkukBLe39B1ZST26m2DbYND4Fe9W > Afg%3D&reserved=0>. > > Original (this doc): > > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 > 8 > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+- > +-+ > > --> > > > > > > I confirm it looks good, it was pretty much copy-pasted :-) > > > > > > > > > > > > From Section 4.4 of RFC 7854: > > > > > > 0 1 2 > 3 > > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 > 9 0 1 > > 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Hi, > > > > Please see inline: > > > > On 4/2/25 00:04, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > > > > > Authors, > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as > > necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML > file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] For clarity, may we replace "oversight" with > "overlap"? > > Original: > > As the BGP Monitoring Protocol has > > been extended, this oversight has become problematic. > > Perhaps: > > As the BGP Monitoring Protocol has > > been extended, this overlap has become problematic. > > --> > > > > > > That works! > > > > > > > > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] We find the "corresponding missing registry" > somewhat > > confusing because it seems to refer to the registry being > renamed as > > "missing". Please consider whether the suggested text would be > more clear. > > Original: > > In this > > document, we create a distinct namespace for the Peer Up > message to > > eliminate this overlap, and create the corresponding missing > > registry. > > Perhaps: > > In this > > document, we create distinct namespaces for the Peer Up and > Initiation > > messages to eliminate the overlap. > > --> > > > > > > That works! Thanks! > > > > > > > > > > 3) <!-- [rfced] Section 3: Please review the questions below. > > a) It is unclear to us whether Section 3.1 refers to the > updates to > > the "BMP Initiation Information TLVs" registry [1] or if it > indicates > > that "Initiation" should to be updated to "Initiation > Information" in > > the "BMP Message Types" registry [2], or both. > > Please review the IANA registries and let us know if updates > are needed. > > [1] > > > https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2 > Fwww. > > iana.org%2Fassignments%2Fbmp-parameters%2Fbmp- > parameters.xhtml%23initi > > ation-information- > tlvs&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7 > > > Caf7fe6848cf14d2f7c6808dd5139ff39%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5 > d20%7 > > > C0%7C0%7C638756032026725501%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hc > GkiOn > > > RydWUsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjo > yfQ%3 > > > D%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=kONuXoBoZbKf%2B%2F81zg3sFobfYl%2FEnTOe%2B > vJ%2F > > oIpTiIE%3D&reserved=0 [2] > > > https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2 > Fwww. > > iana.org%2Fassignments%2Fbmp-parameters%2Fbmp- > parameters.xhtml%23messa > > ge- > types&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7Caf7fe6848cf > 14 > > > d2f7c6808dd5139ff39%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C > 63875 > > > 6032026732823%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlY > iOiIw > > > LjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjoyfQ%3D%3D%7C0% > 7C%7C > > > %7C&sdata=PFitO9UHG1aVU5y57k9%2B8logYahgeBxu2y8eFwrC5rs%3D&reserv > ed=0 > > b) If updating the entry in "BMP Message Types" is intended, we > > suggest describing the action in the IANA Considerations > section as > > well. Please provide text. > > > > > > None of the two, we are just updating RFC7854: > > > > in section 4.4 of RFC7854 the optional TLV that can follow an > > Initiation message is called "Information TLV". We are just > changing > > that definition to "Initiation Information TLV" to limit the > scope to > > the Initialization message only. Nothing to do for IANA here as > in > > section 10.5 of RFC7854 the registry is correctly already named > "BMP > > Initiation Message TLVs". (see more in my comment to your point > "d") > > > > > > > > > > c) The section title feels overloaded. May we change it as > follows? > > Original: > > 3.1. Revision to Information TLV, Renamed as Initiation > Information > > TLV > > Perhaps: > > 3.1. Revision to the Information TLV > > > > > > Agree! > > > > > > > > > > d) Somewhat related, Section 3.3 says: > > Original: > > The Peer Up Information TLV is used by the Peer Up message. > > Is the Peer Up Information TLV an IANA-registered value? We > don't see > > "Peer Up Information" in the BMP registry. > > --> > > > > > > Similarly to before, we are just updating RFC7854. In section > 4.10 of RFC7854 we find "Information: Information about the peer, > using the Information TLV (Section 4.4) format. [ .. ]"; so we > are overloading the term Information TLV for two different > message types, Initialization and Peer Up; in this document we > say they are called differently and each will ultimately point to > a different IANA registry: > > > > * Initialization Information TLV field to the existing "BMP > Initiation > > Information TLVs" IANA registry; > > > > * Peer Up Information TLV field to the newly created (as part > of this > > document) "BMP Peer Up Information TLVs" IANA registry; > > > > Hope this makes things more clear. > > > > > > > > > > 4) <!-- [rfced] The text mentions Type 0 being revised, but the > text > > that follows also includes definitions for Types 1 and 2. May > we > > update the text as follows for clarity? > > Original: > > The definition of Type = 0 is revised to be: > > Perhaps: > > The definition of Type = 0 is revised as shown below. > > Type = 1 and Type = 2 are unchanged; they are provided > > for here for completeness. > > --> > > > > > > Agree! > > > > > > > > > > 5) <!-- [rfced] Because this text is supposed to replace text > in RFC > > 9736, we have updated "defined below (Section 3.3)" to read > "defined > > in Section > > 3.3 of RFC 9736." Rationale: if this text were incorporated > into RFC > > 7854, "below (Section 3.3)" would be incorrect. > > Original: > > * Information: Information about the peer, using the Peer > Up > > Information TLV format defined below (Section 3.3). > > --> > > > > > > Agree! > > > > > > > > > > 6) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that the bit ruler appears as > expected. > > Typically the numbers appear over the hyphens. Compare the > alignment > > with the figure in Section 4.4 of RFC 7854 > <https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F% > 2Fwww.rfc-editor.org%2Frfc%2Frfc7854.html%23section- > 4.4&data=05%7C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7Caf7fe6848cf14 > d2f7c6808dd5139ff39%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C > 638756032026740296%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydW > UsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsIlAiOiJXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjoyfQ% > 3D%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=tq6jvCUBRj%2F2Q9dibsvlj5TfZXbkrrTRNjMvP% > 2BIroqs%3D&reserved=0>. > > Original (this doc): > > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 > 8 > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+- > +-+ > > --> > > > > > > I confirm it looks good, it was pretty much copy-pasted :-) > > > > > > > > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] Some author comments are present in the XML. > Please > > confirm that no updates related to these comments are > outstanding. > > Note that the comments will be deleted prior to publication. > > --> > > > > > > I confirm there are no updates and they can be deleted. > > > > > > > > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion > of the > > online Style Guide > > > <https://eur03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F% > 2Fwww > > .rfc- > editor.org%2Fstyleguide%2Fpart2%2F%23inclusive_language&data=05%7 > > > C02%7Cmohamed.boucadair%40orange.com%7Caf7fe6848cf14d2f7c6808dd51 > 39ff3 > > > 9%7C90c7a20af34b40bfbc48b9253b6f5d20%7C0%7C0%7C638756032026747965 > %7CUn > > > known%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJFbXB0eU1hcGkiOnRydWUsIlYiOiIwLjAuMDAwMCIsI > lAiOi > > > JXaW4zMiIsIkFOIjoiTWFpbCIsIldUIjoyfQ%3D%3D%7C0%7C%7C%7C&sdata=2dY > tGB%2 > > FxWrWSE3C19Mx7swQwoGjvjbYMf848gEkj2bE%3D&reserved=0> > > and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this > nature > > typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for > readers. > > Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but > this > > should still be reviewed as a best practice. > > --> > > > > > > It seems all fine to me, thanks for bringing this up. > > > > Paolo > > > > > > > > > > > > > _________________________________________________________________ > _____ > > _____________________________________ > > _ > > Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des > informations > > confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre > diffuses, > > exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce > message > > par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire > ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant > susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si > ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. 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