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The files have been posted here (please refresh): https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.xml https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.txt https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.html https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.pdf The relevant diff files have been posted here: https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-diff.html (comprehensive diff) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this) For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9705 Thank you, RFC Editor/ap > On Jan 23, 2025, at 8:30 AM, Alanna Paloma <apal...@staff.rfc-editor.org> > wrote: > > Hi Authors, > > This is another friendly reminder that we await your reviews and approvals of > the updated files. > > The files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.xml > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.txt > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.pdf > > The relevant diff files have been posted here: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff > between last version and this) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between > last version and this) > > For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9705 > > Thank you, > RFC Editor/ap > >> On Jan 16, 2025, at 12:49 PM, Alanna Paloma <apal...@staff.rfc-editor.org> >> wrote: >> >> Authors, >> >> This is a friendly reminder that we await your reviews and approvals of the >> updated files. >> >> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.xml >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.txt >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.html >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.pdf >> >> The relevant diff files have been posted here: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-diff.html (comprehensive diff) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff >> between last version and this) >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between >> last version and this) >> >> Once we’ve received all necessary approvals, we will move this document >> forward in the publication process. >> >> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9705 >> >> Thank you, >> RFC Editor/ap >> >>> On Jan 9, 2025, at 10:59 AM, Alanna Paloma <apal...@staff.rfc-editor.org> >>> wrote: >>> >>> Hi Chandra, >>> >>> The files have been updated per your request. >>> >>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.xml >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.txt >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.html >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705.pdf >>> >>> The relevant diff files have been posted here: >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-diff.html (comprehensive diff) >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes) >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff >>> between last version and this) >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9705-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff >>> between last version and this) >>> >>> We will await any further changes you may have and approvals from each >>> author prior to moving forward in the publication process. >>> >>> [Note that my email address has changed from <apal...@amsl.com> to >>> <apal...@staff.rfc-editor.org>.] >>> >>> Thank you, >>> RFC Editor/ap >>> >>>> On Jan 9, 2025, at 8:11 AM, Chandrasekar Ramachandran >>>> <csekar=40juniper....@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote: >>>> >>>> Please find a few more comments below. I am going through the document >>>> fully once again and will provide a final list of comments (if any) on >>>> Monday. >>>> >>>> Abstract: >>>> >>>> Facility backup method allow one or more LSPs traversing... >>>> should be >>>> Facility backup method allows one or more LSPs traversing... >>>> >>>> Security Considerations: >>>> >>>> The security considerations pertaining to the original RSVP protocols >>>> ([RFC2205], [RFC3209], and [RFC5920]) remain relevant. >>>> should be >>>> The security considerations pertaining to the original RSVP protocol >>>> ([RFC2205], [RFC3209], and [RFC5920]) remain relevant. >>>> >>>>>> b) Should "RSVP" be added to the title for consistency with the rest >>>>>> of the document and the abbreviated title? >>>>>> >>>>>> Original: >>>>>> Refresh-interval Independent FRR Facility Protection >>>>>> >>>>>> Current: >>>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent Fast Reroute (FRR) Facility Protection >>>>>> >>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP Fast Reroute (RI-RSVP-FRR) >>>>>> Facility Protection >>>>>> >>>>>> --> >>>>> >>>>> [CR] To keep the name consistent with RFC 4090 and RFC 8370, it can be >>>>> RSVP- >>>>> TE. >>>>> >>>>> NEW: >>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP-TE Fast Reroute Facility Protection >>>> >>>> On the earlier discussion (shown above) on whether "RSVP" should be added >>>> for which we provided a comment to make it "RSVP-TE", it will be better to >>>> keep it as "RSVP" as you suggested because that is the convention used in >>>> RFC 8370. >>>> >>>> Thanks, >>>> Chandra. >>>> >>>> >>>> Juniper Business Use Only >>>>> -----Original Message----- >>>>> From: Alanna Paloma <apal...@amsl.com> >>>>> Sent: Tuesday, January 7, 2025 6:01 AM >>>>> To: Chandrasekar Ramachandran <cse...@juniper.net> >>>>> Cc: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org; ts...@cisco.com; inami...@google.com; >>>>> dante.j.pace...@verizon.com; mpls-...@ietf.org; mpls-cha...@ietf.org; >>>>> n.leym...@telekom.de; james.n.guich...@futurewei.com; >>>>> auth48archive@rfc-editor.org >>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9705 <draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-22> for >>>>> your >>>>> review >>>>> >>>>> [External Email. 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Note that we do not make changes once a document is >>>>> published as an RFC. >>>>> >>>>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page >>>>> below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. >>>>> >>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: >>>>> https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc- >>>>> editor.org/auth48/rfc9705__;!!NEt6yMaO- >>>>> gk!Ffb5OXElFZyT8k54wSdXaSSIZVB4koLrq4- >>>>> gSHhCAQNrB5_iTsKfND9wzggggVyJzUI4xyP_pDM6vQ$ >>>>> >>>>> Thank you, >>>>> RFC Editor/ap >>>>> >>>>>> On Jan 6, 2025, at 8:51 AM, Chandrasekar Ramachandran >>>>> <csekar=40juniper....@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote: >>>>>> >>>>>> Please find our responses inline. >>>>>> >>>>>> Thanks, >>>>>> Chandra. >>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>> Juniper Business Use Only >>>>>>> -----Original Message----- >>>>>>> From: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org> >>>>>>> Sent: Friday, December 20, 2024 6:19 AM >>>>>>> To: Chandrasekar Ramachandran <cse...@juniper.net>; >>>>> ts...@cisco.com; >>>>>>> inami...@google.com; dante.j.pace...@verizon.com >>>>>>> Cc: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org; mpls-...@ietf.org; >>>>>>> mpls-cha...@ietf.org; n.leym...@telekom.de; >>>>>>> james.n.guich...@futurewei.com; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org >>>>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9705 <draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-22> >>>>>>> for your review >>>>>>> >>>>>>> [External Email. Be cautious of content] >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Authors, >>>>>>> >>>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as >>>>>>> necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please review the following questions and changes >>>>>>> regarding this document's title: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> a) FYI - Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 >>>>>>> ("RFC Style Guide"). >>>>>>> >>>>>>> b) Should "RSVP" be added to the title for consistency with the rest >>>>>>> of the document and the abbreviated title? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> Refresh-interval Independent FRR Facility Protection >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Current: >>>>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent Fast Reroute (FRR) Facility Protection >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP Fast Reroute (RI-RSVP-FRR) >>>>>>> Facility Protection >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] To keep the name consistent with RFC 4090 and RFC 8370, it can be >>>>> RSVP-TE. >>>>>> >>>>>> NEW: >>>>>> Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP-TE Fast Reroute Facility >>>>>> Protection >>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear >>>>>>> in the >>>>>>> title) for use on https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.rfc- >>>>>>> editor.org/search__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!FM2VL8WYKZ4l- >>>>> zDnXFEMT1bMvVmTs- >>>>>>> E1_Al7pzTrypczYwOa9zufdnM4Qo4xmCWUhUKQDOal5wQIaaUoCPHz-SQ$ >>>>> . - >>>>>>> -> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] "ri-rsvp-frr" - both upper and lower cases >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] Should the first bullet be separated into two >>>>>>> separate bullets because it contains two separate problems? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> The use of Refresh messages to >>>>>>> cover many possible failures has resulted in a number of operational >>>>>>> problems. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> - One problem relates to RSVP control plane scaling due to periodic >>>>>>> refreshes of Path and Resv messages, another relates to the >>>>>>> reliability and latency of RSVP signaling. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> - An additional problem is the time to clean up the stale state >>>>>>> after a tear message is lost. For more on these problems see >>>>>>> Section 1 of RSVP Refresh Overhead Reduction Extensions [RFC2961]. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> The use of Refresh messages to >>>>>>> cover many possible failures has resulted in a number of operational >>>>>>> problems. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> * One problem relates to RSVP control plane scaling due to periodic >>>>>>> refreshes of Path and Resv messages >>>>>>> >>>>>>> * Another problem relates to the relates to the reliability and >>>>>>> latency of >>>>>>> RSVP signaling. reliability and latency of RSVP signaling. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> * An additional problem is the time to clean up the stale state >>>>>>> after a tear message is lost. For more on these problems see >>>>>>> Section 1 of [RFC2961]. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 4) <!--[rfced] To clarify this document's relation to [RFC2961], may >>>>>>> we update this sentence as follows? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> Therefore, this document makes support for [RFC2961] a pre-requisite. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> Therefore, [RFC2961] is a prerequisite for this document. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 5) <!-- [rfced] Please review the following questions and changes >>>>>>> regarding Section 2 ("Terminology"). >>>>>>> >>>>>>> a) The terminology list contains a mixture of both abbreviations and >>>>>>> definitions. For consistency and readability, may we separate >>>>>>> definitions and abbreviations into two different lists? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> b) May we update some list items for a more accurate and 1:1 >>>>>>> relationship between an abbreviation and its expansion? Please see >>>>>>> examples in the "Perhaps" text below. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> c) In addition, the format of some definition items may suggest that >>>>> "router" >>>>>>> and "node" can be used interchangeably (see some examples below). >>>>>>> Please review and confirm if this is accurate. May we update the >>>>>>> terms as suggested below? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Originals: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Phop node: Previous-hop router along the label switched path >>>>>>> >>>>>>> MP: Merge Point router as defined in [RFC4090] >>>>>>> >>>>>>> LP-MP node: Merge Point router at the tail of Link-Protecting >>>>>>> bypass tunnel >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps (a few examples): >>>>>>> >>>>>>> PHOP: Previous-Hop (can refer to a router or node along the LSP) >>>>>>> >>>>>>> MP: Merge Point (can refer to a router as defined in [RFC4090]) >>>>>>> >>>>>>> LP-MP: Link-Protecting Merge Point (can refer to a router or node at the >>>>>>> tail of a Link-Protecting bypass tunnel) >>>>>>> >>>>>>> d) FYI - We have added expansions for Path State Block (PSB) and >>>>>>> Reservation State Block (RSB) to this terminology list to avoid >>>>>>> expanding them inside of the definition of "LSP state". Please review >>>>>>> and let us know if there are additional abbreviations or terminology >>>>>>> used in this document (such as LSP, FRR, etc.) that you would like to >>>>>>> add to >>>>> this terminology list. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] All proposed changes to Terminology Section look good. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 6) <!-- [rfced] How may we update "has been configured to be long of >>>>>>> the order of minutes" for clarity? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> Assume that refresh interval has been configured to be long of the order >>>>> of >>>>>>> minutes and refresh reduction extensions are enabled on all routers. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> Assume that refresh interval has been configured to be as long as the >>>>> order >>>>>>> of minutes and that refresh reduction extensions are enabled on all >>>>> routers. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 7) <!-- [rfced] How may we update this section title to avoid using >>>>>>> an RFC number as an adjective? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 4.1. Requirement on RFC 4090 Capable Node to advertise RI-RSVP >>>>>>> Capability >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps (remove RFC number): >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 4.1. Requirement for Capable Nodes to Advertise the RI-RSVP >>>>>>> Capability >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps (keep RFC number): >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 4.1. Requirement for Capable Nodes from RFC 4090 to Advertise the >>>>>>> RI-RSVP Capability >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] Both the changes proposed does not convey that the specific >>>>> requirement in the section is for 4090 capable nodes. >>>>>> Does the following look better? >>>>>> >>>>>> NEW: >>>>>> >>>>>> 4.1. Requirement for RFC 4090 Capable Nodes to Advertise the RI-RSVP >>>>>> Capability >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 8) <!-- [rfced] Can the second sentence in the text below be made >>>>>>> more concise, as it mostly contains repeated information from the >>>>>>> previous sentence? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> - The PLR MUST also include its router ID in a Node-ID sub-object in >>>>>>> RRO object carried in any subsequent Path message corresponding to >>>>>>> the LSP. While including its router ID in the Node-ID sub-object >>>>>>> carried in the outgoing Path message, the PLR MUST include the >>>>>>> Node-ID sub-object after including its IPv4/IPv6 address or >>>>>>> unnumbered interface ID sub-object. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> * The PLR MUST also include its router ID in a Node-ID sub-object in >>>>>>> the RRO object that is carried in any subsequent Path message >>>>>>> corresponding to the LSP. While doing so, the PLR >>>>>>> MUST include the Node-ID sub-object after including its IPv4/IPv6 >>>>>>> address or unnumbered interface ID sub-object. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 9) <!-- [rfced] May we update the text below to improve readability? >>>>>>> In particular, how may we clarify what the MP "sets" the I-bit to? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> If the MP has set the I-bit in the CAPABILITY object [RFC8370] carried >>>>>>> in Hello message corresponding to the Node-ID based Hello session, >>>>> then >>>>>>> the PLR MUST conclude that the MP supports refresh- interval >>>>>>> independent >>>>>>> FRR procedures defined in this document. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> The PLR MUST conclude that the MP >>>>>>> supports the refresh-interval independent FRR procedures defined in >>>>>>> this document if the MP has set the I-bit in the CAPABILITY object >>>>>>> [RFC8370] (carried in the Hello message) to correspond with the Node- >>>>>>> ID-based Hello session. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] As the text above only applies to the I-bit in the CAPABILITY object >>>>> carried in the Hello message corresponding to the Node-ID based hello >>>>> session, the following text will be the correct one. >>>>>> >>>>>> NEW: >>>>>> >>>>>> The PLR MUST conclude that the MP >>>>>> supports the refresh-interval independent FRR procedures defined in >>>>>> this document if the MP has set the I-bit in the CAPABILITY object >>>>>> [RFC8370] carried in the Hello message corresponding to the Node- >>>>>> ID-based Hello session. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 10) <!-- [rfced] FYI - There are a number of instances throughout the >>>>>>> document where we have updated text to be formatted as a bulleted >>>>>>> list to improve readability. >>>>>>> Please review these instances and let us know of any objections. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] Most changes are good except for the ones listed below. >>>>>> >>>>>> (CR-i) Abstract >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: Facility backup method allows one or more LSPs >>>>>> PROPOSED: Facility backup methods allow one or more LSPs >>>>>> >>>>>> "Facility backup" is a mechanism defined by RFC 4090 and so plural should >>>>> not be used for that. >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: The many-to-one nature of local repair technique >>>>>> PROPOSED: The many-to-one nature of local repair techniques >>>>>> >>>>>> Same as the previous comment on "facility backup" method. >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: timeout and hence make facility backup method >>>>>> PROPOSED: timeout, hence, making facility backup methods >>>>>> >>>>>> It should be "facility backup method". >>>>>> >>>>>> (CR-ii) 4. Solution Aspects >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: introduce PLR and MP procedures to establish Node-ID based hello >>>>>> session between >>>>>> PROPOSED: introduce PLR and MP procedures to establish Node-ID-based >>>>>> Hello sessions between >>>>>> >>>>>> There will be only one node-id based Hello session between a PLR and MP >>>>> pair. >>>>>> >>>>>> (CR-iii) 4.4. Conditional PathTear >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: >>>>>> In the example provided in Section 4.3.3 of this document, B deletes >>>>>> the PSB and RSB states corresponding to the LSP once B detects its >>>>>> Phop link went down as B is not an MP. >>>>>> >>>>>> PROPOSED: >>>>>> In the example provided in Section 4.3.3 of this document, B deletes >>>>>> the PSB and RSB states corresponding to the LSP once B detects its >>>>>> Phop link that went down as B is not an MP. >>>>>> >>>>>> Instead of adding "that", should the text be the following? >>>>>> >>>>>> CR-NEW: >>>>>> In the example provided in Section 4.3.3 of this document, B deletes >>>>>> the PSB and RSB states corresponding to the LSP once B detects its >>>>>> Phop link has gone down as B is not an MP. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 11) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have updated the text as follows to improve >>>>>>> readability. >>>>>>> Please let us know of any objections or if any further updates are >>>>>>> needed. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Now when A-B link fails, as B is not an >>>>>>> MP and its Phop link has failed, B will delete the LSP state (this >>>>>>> behavior is required for unprotected LSPs - refer to Section 4.3.1 of >>>>>>> this document). >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Current: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Now, when the A-B link fails, B will delete the LSP state, because B is >>>>>>> not >>>>>>> an MP and its Phop link has failed (this behavior is required for >>>>>>> unprotected LSPs; refer to Section 4.3.1 of this document). >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 12) <!-- [rfced] As all other fields are defined following Figure 2, >>>>>>> should the Length field also have an entry? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Current: >>>>>>> 0 1 2 3 >>>>>>> 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 >>>>>>> >>>>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+-- >>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+- >>>>>>> | Length | Class | C-type | >>>>>>> >>>>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+-- >>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+- >>>>>>> | Flags (Reserved) |M| >>>>>>> >>>>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+-- >>>>>>> +--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+--+- >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Figure 2: CONDITIONS Object >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Class: 135 >>>>>>> C-type: 1 >>>>>>> Flags: 32 bit field >>>>>>> M: Bit 31 is the Merge-point condition (M) bit. If the M bit is set >>>>>>> to 1, then the PathTear message MUST be processed according to the >>>>>>> receiver router role, i.e., if the receiving router is an MP or >>>>>>> not for the LSP. If it is not set, then the PathTear message MUST >>>>>>> be processed as a normal PathTear message for the LSP. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. Length need not be >>>>> explicitly defined because it is the same for all RSVP objects. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 13) <!-- [rfced] May we provide additional context or lead-in text >>>>>>> for the list below? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Consider that B-C link goes down on the same example topology >>>>>>> (Figure 1). As C is the NP-MP for the PLR A, C will retain LSP >>>>>>> state. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 1. The LSP is preempted on C. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 2. C will delete the RSB state... >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Consider that the B-C link goes down on the same example topology >>>>>>> (Figure 1). As C is the NP-MP for the PLR A, C will retain LSP >>>>>>> state. This means: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 1. The LSP is preempted on C. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 2. C will delete the RSB state... >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The inclusion of "This means:" will not convey the intended meaning >>>>> here. The first paragraph starting with "If an LSP is preempted on an >>>>> NP-MP >>>>> after its Phop link..." specifies the behavior in general upon an event, >>>>> and the >>>>> rest of the Section 4.5.3.2 intends to convey what will happen in the >>>>> event of >>>>> preemption in a specific condition. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 14) <!-- [rfced] To reflect usage in RFC 8370, may we update 'the >>>>>>> flag "Refresh interval Independent RSVP" or RI-RSVP flag' below as >>>>> follows? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> An implementation supporting RI-RSVP-FRR extensions MUST set the flag >>>>>>> "Refresh interval Independent RSVP" or RI-RSVP flag in the CAPABILITY >>>>>>> object carried in Hello messages as specified in RSVP-TE Scaling >>>>>>> Techniques [RFC8370]. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> An implementation supporting RI-RSVP-FRR extensions MUST set the >>>>>>> RI- RSVP >>>>>>> Capable flag in the CAPABILITY object carried in Hello messages as >>>>>>> specified in RSVP-TE Scaling Techniques [RFC8370]. >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 15) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have updated the following text to match >>>>>>> similar introductory text from the previous section. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> The procedures are as follows. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Current: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> The procedures on the upstream direction are as follows: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 16) <!-- [rfced] For clarity, may we update the text below as follows? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> So, the implementations >>>>>>> SHOULD provide the option to configure Node-ID neighbor specific or >>>>>>> global authentication key to authentication messages received from >>>>>>> Node-ID neighbors. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Therefore, the implementations SHOULD provide the option to >>>>>>> configure either a >>>>>>> specific neighbor or global Node-ID authentication key to authentication >>>>>>> messages received from Node-ID neighbors. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> --> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The authors are fine with the proposed text. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> 17) <!-- [rfced] Please review the following questions and changes >>>>>>> regarding the terminology used in this document. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> a) We note some instances where "RSVP" is not included in >>>>>>> "Refresh-Interval Independent FRR" (in the document title and >>>>>>> elsewhere). For consistency, should "RSVP" be added to these instances? >>>>> Some examples are listed below. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>> 4.6.1. Detecting Support for Refresh interval Independent FRR >>>>>>> ... >>>>>>> "Refresh interval Independent FRR" or RI-RSVP-FRR refers to the set >>>>>>> of procedures defined in this document to... >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>> 4.6.1. Detecting Support for Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP FRR >>>>>>> ... >>>>>>> "Refresh-Interval Independent RSVP FRR", or RI-RSVP-FRR, refers to the >>>>> set >>>>>>> of procedures defined in this document to... >>>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The proposed changes look good with the proviso related to "RSVP-TE" >>>>> in place of RSVP (see the response to comment #1 earlier). >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> b) To parallel usage in RFC 4090, may we update the capitalization of >>>>>>> the terms below throughout this document? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Phop > PHOP >>>>>>> PPhop > PPHOP >>>>>>> Nhop > NHOP >>>>>>> NNhop > NNHOP >>>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The proposed changes above look good. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> c) To parallel usage in RFC 8796, may we update the capitalization of >>>>>>> the terms below throughout this document? >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Association source > Association Source B-SFRR-Ready Extended >>>>>>> Association object > B-SFRR-Ready Extended ASSOCIATION object >>>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>> [CR] The proposed changes above look good. >>>>>> >>>>>>> >>>>>>> d) Should instances of "RRO object" and "LSP path" be updated to >>>>>>> simply read "RRO" and "LSP" to avoid redundancy? 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