+1 Bill’s suggested edits below.
> On Jul 28, 2021, at 3:43 PM, William Herrin <[email protected]> wrote: > > On Tue, Jul 27, 2021 at 9:56 AM ARIN <[email protected]> wrote: >> In Section 8.3.: >> >> Under “Conditions on source of the transfer,” replace “Number resources >> received as the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes >> of this restriction” with “This restriction does not include 8.2 transfers.” > > Howdy, > > They both seem about the same to me. The replacement is less clumsy > than the original but still clumsy. Just throwing out some > wordsmithing here: > > Current; > > The source entity must not have received a transfer, allocation, or > assignment of IPv4 number resources from ARIN for the 12 months prior > to the approval of a transfer request. Number resources received as > the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of > this restriction. > > Suggested: > > Excluding section 8.2 transfers, the source entity must not have > received a transfer, allocation, or assignment of IPv4 number > resources from ARIN during the 12 months prior to the approval of a > transfer request. > > That seems to me to flow better. > > Regards, > Bill Herrin > > > -- > William Herrin > [email protected] > https://bill.herrin.us/ > _______________________________________________ > ARIN-PPML > You are receiving this message because you are subscribed to > the ARIN Public Policy Mailing List ([email protected]). > Unsubscribe or manage your mailing list subscription at: > https://lists.arin.net/mailman/listinfo/arin-ppml > Please contact [email protected] if you experience any issues. Brian Jones [email protected]
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