Nice! Comments in line. James Alexander Community Advocacy Wikimedia Foundation (415) 839-6885 x6716 @jamesofur
On Wed, Aug 5, 2015 at 5:56 PM, Joe Sutherland <[email protected]> wrote: > Hey all, > > We just published "News on Wikipedia: Beijing wins Winter Olympics, MH370 > wreckage recovered, and more" to the Wikimedia blog. URL: > > https://blog.wikimedia.org/2015/08/05/beijing-olympics-mh370-wreckage/ > > We plan to send out five pieces of social for this story, spread through > the next *three days* (or thereabouts) to keep things timely. > > Please do comment for tone. > > *Twitter:* > > • China's capital Beijing will host the 2022 Winter Olympics. > #NewsOnWikipedia > LGTM [Sidenote - this is going to make the mental disambiguation of saying "Beijing Olympics" in my head really annoying] > • Barack Obama (@potus) announced his Clean Power Plan this week. > #cleanpower #NewsOnWikipedia > LGTM > • Wreckage found on French island Réunion is from missing plane #MH370. > #NewsOnWikipedia > Perhaps "French territory *of *Réunion" ? That sounds better to me but I'm not actually sure if it's more correct/better. You'll know the grammar side better then I :). Otherwise LGTM > • Zimbabwe have requested the extradition of an American hunter for > #Cecil's killing. #NewsOnWikipedia > • Secretive Taliban leader Mohammed Omar actually died in 2013. > #NewsOnWikipedia > Both LGTM > *Facebook/G+:* > > • Beijing beat out Almaty of Kazakhstan to become the host city for the > 2022 Winter Olympics this week. #NewsOnWikipedia > Hmmmm.... I'm torn between "Almaty of Kazakhstan" (which sounds awesome but kinda sounds like an aristocratic name to me) and "Almaty, Kazakhstan". Happy with either, otherwise LGTM • Barack Obama unveiled his Clean Power Plan this week. #NewsOnWikipedia > LGTM • Plane parts found on the French territory Réunion were this week > confirmed as from missing Malaysia Airlines Flight 370. #NewsOnWikipedia > Same "of" question as above, otherwise LGTM • Zimbabwe last week requested the extradition of American hunter Walter > Palmer following the killing of Cecil the lion. #NewsOnWikipedia > perhaps "f*ormally* requested the extradition" ? (I'm not actually sure that's true but I think it is? Just thinking that's different then some of the random statements they mentioned about wanting extradition earlier). Otherwise LGTM > • Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed Omar. > This week it was confirmed that he died two years ago. #NewsOnWikipedia > > Hmm, I'm happy with this one (I like the images fact) but worry that it could feel like a bit of a non sequitur. Perhaps tying it together with something like: - Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed Omar. *It's likely to stay that way unless more are found because t*his week it was confirmed that he died two years ago. #NewsOnWikipedia best, > Joe > > -- > *Joe Sutherland* > Communications Intern [remote] > m: +44 (0) 7722 916 433 | t: @jrbsu <http://twitter.com/jrbsu> | w: > JSutherland <https://meta.wikimedia.org/wiki/User:JSutherland_(WMF)> > >
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