Some more.

"Development" page:

"The proclaimed mission is" => "Our mission is"

Let's be consistent with "create" vs "creating". It's different here  
from the main page. I think "creating" is better.

In the enumerated list, I would prefer n-dashes (–) instead of  
hyphens.

"There is the IRC channel" => "There is an IRC channel"

"Sage uses several techniques to continually improve overall software  
quality:" => "We take code quality seriously:"

On the search page, I find the list of examples a bit confusing. It  
looks like a list of headings for different types of searches you can  
perform.

"Acknowledgements" page:

"Developing Sage benefited from financial support of numerous  
institutions and the work of many developers of included components."  
=> "Sage development has benefited from the financial support of  
numerous institutions, and the previous (and ongoing) work of many  
authors of included components".

"Acknowledgment for Supporting Sage" sound weird to me.

"Financial and Infrastructure Support" => "Financial and  
infrastructure support". I'm not sure if infrastructure is the right  
word. Can't quite think of the right word now. Maybe "material". Not  
sure.

Map:

"Sage Developers around the World" => "Sage Developers around the  
world", or even "Sage developers around the world"

Back to the main page:

"search Sage related websites" => "search Sage-related websites"

david


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