Paul,
Revision based on your comments and suggestions has been uploaded:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement/
Hope you can change your review status with this new revision.
Thank you,
Linda
-----Original Message-----
From: Paul Kyzivat <pkyzi...@alum.mit.edu>
Sent: Thursday, March 23, 2023 10:20 PM
To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>;
draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement....@ietf.org
Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-...@ietf.org>; rtgwg@ietf.org
Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Early review of
draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-21
Linda,
I finally convinced the review tracking system to recognize my revision to the
review.
Sorry for the trouble,
Paul
On 3/22/23 5:07 PM, Paul Kyzivat wrote:
> Linda,
>
> On 3/22/23 4:48 PM, Linda Dunbar wrote:
>> Paul,
>> Thank you very much. Can you please change the review status for the
>> draft?
>
> I haven't seen a revised version yet. But I withdrew my only issue I
> just sent a revised review that removes it and leaves only the nits.
>
> I'm currently struggling with the review tracking system to get the
> status change recorded there, but will do so.
>
> Thanks,
> Paul
>
>> Thank you very much,
>> Linda
>>
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Paul Kyzivat <pkyzi...@alum.mit.edu>
>> Sent: Wednesday, March 22, 2023 9:25 AM
>> To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>;
>> draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement....@ietf.org
>> Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-...@ietf.org>; rtgwg@ietf.org
>> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Early review of
>> draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-21
>>
>> Hi Linda,
>>
>> On 3/21/23 8:10 PM, Linda Dunbar wrote:
>>> Paul,
>>> Thank you very much for the review.
>>> Please see below for the resolution to your comments.
>>> The revision will be uploaded next Monday when the IETF submission
>>> opens.
>>> Linda
>>
>> I've included some followup comments inline below.
>>
>> [snip]
>>
>>> ISSUE (MINOR)
>>> The intended purpose of and audience for this document isn't clear.
>>> I infer this is primarily intended to kick off and guide further
>>> normative standards work, and hence the audience is other IETF
>>> participants. It would be helpful to spell this out. The abstract
>>> notes things that are out of scope. Clarifying the audience and
>>> purpose would also help in determining scope.
>>> [Linda] How about adding the following statement?
>>> /The intent is primarily for guiding further standards work in the
>>> Routing Area./
>>
>> After rereading the relevant sections I think I was wrong to raise an
>> issue - you seem to have sufficiently explained the intent without
>> making any changes.
>>
>> [snip]
>>
>>> * Section 3.2
>>> Something is wrong with the grammar in:
>>> "When those failure events happen, the Cloud DC GW which is visible
>>> to clients are running fine."
>>> It can be fixed by s/clients are/clients is/, if that is what you mean.
>>> [Linda] Is the following statement more clear?
>>> /When a site failure happens, the Cloud DC GW visible to clients is
>>> running fine; therefore, the site failure is not detectable by the
>>> Clients using BFD. /
>>
>> Yes, that reads well.
>>
>> [snip]
>>
>>> [Linda] Changed the statement to the following:
>>> /Many applications have multiple instances instantiated in different
>>> Cloud DCs. A commonly deployed solution has DNS server(s) responding
>>> to an FQDN (Fully Qualified Domain Name) inquiry with an IP address
>>> of the closest or lowest cost DC that can reach the instance. /
>>
>> Sounds good.
>>
>> [snip]
>>
>> Thanks,
>> Paul
>
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