Paul,
Thank you very much. Can you please change the review status for the draft?
Thank you very much,
Linda
-----Original Message-----
From: Paul Kyzivat <pkyzi...@alum.mit.edu>
Sent: Wednesday, March 22, 2023 9:25 AM
To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>;
draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement....@ietf.org
Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-...@ietf.org>; rtgwg@ietf.org
Subject: Re: Gen-ART Early review of
draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-21
Hi Linda,
On 3/21/23 8:10 PM, Linda Dunbar wrote:
> Paul,
> Thank you very much for the review.
> Please see below for the resolution to your comments.
> The revision will be uploaded next Monday when the IETF submission opens.
> Linda
I've included some followup comments inline below.
[snip]
> ISSUE (MINOR)
> The intended purpose of and audience for this document isn't clear. I
> infer this is primarily intended to kick off and guide further
> normative standards work, and hence the audience is other IETF
> participants. It would be helpful to spell this out. The abstract
> notes things that are out of scope. Clarifying the audience and
> purpose would also help in determining scope.
> [Linda] How about adding the following statement?
> /The intent is primarily for guiding further standards work in the
> Routing Area./
After rereading the relevant sections I think I was wrong to raise an issue -
you seem to have sufficiently explained the intent without making any changes.
[snip]
> * Section 3.2
> Something is wrong with the grammar in:
> "When those failure events happen, the Cloud DC GW which is visible to
> clients are running fine."
> It can be fixed by s/clients are/clients is/, if that is what you mean.
> [Linda] Is the following statement more clear?
> /When a site failure happens, the Cloud DC GW visible to clients is
> running fine; therefore, the site failure is not detectable by the
> Clients using BFD. /
Yes, that reads well.
[snip]
> [Linda] Changed the statement to the following:
> /Many applications have multiple instances instantiated in different
> Cloud DCs. A commonly deployed solution has DNS server(s) responding
> to an FQDN (Fully Qualified Domain Name) inquiry with an IP address of
> the closest or lowest cost DC that can reach the instance. /
Sounds good.
[snip]
Thanks,
Paul
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