Hi Jeff,

The PR looks good. Thank you.

Cheers,
Med

De : Jeffrey Haas <[email protected]>
Envoyé : mardi 9 septembre 2025 18:57
À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <[email protected]>
Cc : The IESG <[email protected]>; 
[email protected]; [email protected]; 
rtg-bfd@ietf. org <[email protected]>; Reshad Rahman <[email protected]>; Reshad 
Rahman <[email protected]>
Objet : Re: Mohamed Boucadair's No Objection on 
draft-ietf-bfd-optimizing-authentication-30: (with COMMENT)


Med,

The remainder of these are covered in 
https://github.com/bfd-wg/optimized-auth/pull/75


On Sep 5, 2025, at 2:29 AM, 
[email protected]<mailto:[email protected]> wrote:
Consistent with other changes in this doc set, we need to highlight that this 
is for an experimental feature:

OLD:
      "This YANG module augments the base BFD YANG model to add
       attributes related to BFD Optimized Authentication.

NEW:
      "This YANG module augments the base BFD YANG model to add
       attributes related to the experimental BFD Optimized Authentication.

Done.


# Redundant behavior

Section 3
 The contents of an Up packet MUST NOT change aside from the
 Authentication Section without strong authentication.

Vs.

Section 6:
 In this specification, the contents of an Up packet MUST NOT
change

 aside from the Authentication Section without strong
authentication.


Keep the normative language in one place.

The text serves as an emphasis on the procedures and I suggest
keeping each of the instances.

[Med] You can keep the instances, but my suggestion was to keep the normative 
language only once.

I've chosen to lower-case the section 3 instance.

I would not be shocked if someone else in later review notes this as a 
discrepancy.


# YANG terminology

CURRENT:
 This YANG module imports YANG Key Chain [RFC8177], A YANG Data
Model

 for Routing Management (NMDA version) [RFC8349], and YANG Data
Model

 for Bidirectional Forwarding Detection (BFD) [RFC9314].

This should reason about importing the various modules, not data
models. Please refer to 8407bis which says:

"Likewise, "YANG module" should be used when using terms related
to

YANG module specifications (e.g., augmentation or deviation)."

I suspect this comment is incorrect.  Each of the points of
complaint are the title of the RFC in question.  :-)

[Med] You can keep the titles but the point is that we don't import RFCs but 
modules. You can fix this by saying "This YANG module imports modules defined 
in ...". Thanks.

Done.


# Security template

Please update 10.2 to follow the template in RFC8407bis.

I've done so.  Given that the template isn't fully genericized,
please check the implemented.

[Med] I suggest we make this change:

OLD:
  Some of the readable data nodes in this YANG module may be considered
  sensitive or vulnerable in some network environments.  It is thus
  important to control read access (e.g., via get, get-config, or
  notification) to these data nodes.  Specifically, the following
  subtrees and data nodes have particular sensitivities/
  vulnerabilities:

  There are no read-only data nodes defined in this model.

NEW:

  There are no particularly sensitive readable data nodes.

Done.  However, note 8407bis-28's current text is what lead me to the prior 
text.  Consider recommending a change to that document that closes the gap.

-- Jeff

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