Roman Danyliw has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-intermediate-09: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot-positions/ for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-intermediate/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- A few editorial items: ** Section 1. Editorial. s/If size of/If the size of/ ** Section 1. Editorial. Per “… that may interfere badly with some network devices”, can something more precise than “interfere badly” be used? Perhaps: OLD: That may interfere badly with some network devices NEW Which has been shown to cause operational challenge in certain network configurations and devices. ** Section 3.3.2. Editorial. Per “… because peers generally are unaware in which form other side has received them”, there is a missing word here. ** Section 3.3.2. Editorial. s/After n-th exchange/After the n-th exchange/ **Section 3.3.2. Editorial. OLD The IntAuth_[i/r]*A chunk lasts from ... NEW The IntAuth [i/r]*A chunk consists of the sequence of octets from ... ** Section 8. Typo. s/regadless/regardless/ _______________________________________________ IPsec mailing list IPsec@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ipsec
