Hello Behcet :) long time! Many thanks for your review!
I placed proposed changes in GitHub at https://github.com/raw-wg/raw-architecture/commit/0b13749fa529a4282732d8c6fc411689ce75b4a7 Please see below: > > Summary: > > This draft reliable and available wireless architecture in the context of > deterministic networking or DetNet, i.e. the draft > > complements DetNet for wireless. > > Overall, it is a good document, involving huge amount of work, especially I > liked Section 3.1.1.1 3rd and 4th paragraphs explaining wireless single > point > of failure. > > However it has a number of typos and issues. > > Major issues:N/A > > Minor issues: > > It seems like on DetNet there is currently ongoing research and development > involving TSN in IEEE 802.1 and IETF. I suggest that the document makes it > clear that Sections 4 and 5 describe roughly a design which needs to be > implemented together with TSN as part of link layer. > > Makes sense; First paragraph of section 4.3 becomes: " 4.3. RAW and DetNet RAW leverages the DetNet Forwarding sub-layer and requires the support of OAM in DetNet Transit Nodes (see figure 3 of [DetNet-ARCHI] for the dynamic acquisition of link capacity and state to maintain a strict RAW service, end-to-end, over a DetNet Network. In turn, DetNet and thus RAW may benefit from / leverage functionality such as provided by TSN at the lower layers. " Nits/editorial comments: > > Issues: > Many typos: > Sec. 2 controled -> controlled > 2.1.6 massage & 2.1.6 massaged -> message > 3.2 recieve -> receive > The assumption us -> is > Along a alternative paths -> along alternative paths > 5.1 fucntion -> function > > done > Please check, possibly reword: > 3.1.1.1 2nd par. > > edited as: " IP Routers leverage routing protocols to reroute to alternate routes in case of a failure. When links are cabled through the same conduit, they form a shared risk link group (SRLG), and share the same fate if the conduit is cut, making the reroute operation ineffective. The same effect can happen with virtual links that end up in a same physical transport through the intricacies of nested encapsulation. In a same fashion, an interferer or an obstacle may affect multiple wireless transmissions at the same time, even between different sets of peers.. " > Through the games of encapsulation > removed "games" > > 3.2 OODA list Point 2 > may also generate knowledge and wisdom such as a trained model for link > quality > prediction > Sorry what should I do here ? > > On Fig. 6 is there or not tunneling on strict RAW over Detnet? > > No, that's the difference with fig 7 where RAW may traverse an uncertain area, in which case packets may arrive too late and be discarded. > 5.1 > SD-WAN > MPLS-TP undefined > > > > Done Again, many thanks for your review. Please let me know if more changes are in order. all the best, -- Pascal
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