Hi Behcet, Thanks for the feedback, really appreciate it.
Thanks, Yingzhen On Tue, Feb 20, 2024 at 8:57 AM Behcet Sarikaya <sarikaya2...@gmail.com> wrote: > Hi Yingzhen, > > Yes, the changes in Rev. 05 look OK to me. > > Regards, > Behcet > > On Fri, Feb 16, 2024 at 1:11 PM Yingzhen Qu <yingzhen.i...@gmail.com> > wrote: > >> Hi Behcet, >> >> Thanks for the review. We've published version -05 to address your >> comments, please see my answers below inline. >> >> Thanks, >> Yingzhen >> >> On Thu, Feb 15, 2024 at 10:05 AM Behcet Sarikaya via Datatracker < >> nore...@ietf.org> wrote: >> >>> Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya >>> Review result: Ready with Nits >>> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed >>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just >>> like any other last call comments. >>> >>> For more information, please see the FAQ at >>> >>> <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. >>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-tvr-use-cases-04 >>> Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya >>> Review Date: 2024-02-15 >>> IETF LC End Date: 2024-02-15 >>> IESG Telechat date: 2024-02-29 >>> >>> Summary: >>> This document describes time-variant routing use cases in terms of >>> resource >>> preservation, mainly in IoT, operating efficiency in cellular and campus >>> networks, dynamic reachability mainly in satellite networks. It is >>> expected to >>> serve to bring updates to the routing protocols such as IGP, OSPF, etc. >>> It is >>> well written, makes a good case, especially with effective use of simple >>> diagrams and is ready to go. However I have found a few small issues >>> which can >>> be easily fixed. Major issues: >>> >>> Minor issues: >>> >>> Nits/editorial comments: >>> Section 1. I think that adding a paragraph on what is covered in Section >>> 6 >>> would help. >> >> >> [Yingzhen]: As suggested by TSVART review, we've removed Section 6 from >> the document. >> >> Section 3. .. such a through Solar Panels : I don't understand what >>> is meant here, is it solar LED lights? >>> >> >> [Yingzhen]: I've rewritten this paragraph, hope it's clear to you now. >> For your convenience, the current text is copied here: >> An illustrative example of a network necessitating resource preservation >> is an energy-harvesting wireless sensor network. In such a network, nodes >> rely exclusively on environmental sources for power, such as solar panels. >> On-board power levels may fluctuate based on various factors including >> sensor activity, processing demands, and the node's position and >> orientation relative to its energy source. >> >> >>> Section 4. >>> clouds on an optical link : why would cloudy weather affect optical link >>> transmission? >> >> >> [Yingzhen]: I've changed this to "a free-space optical link". Hopefully >> it makes more sense now. >> >> >>> Section 5. it seems like the term ground station is used to mean >>> the user antennas. There is also gateway ground stations. Please clarify >>> this. >>> >> >> [Yingzhen]: I added a sentence about the ground station: A ground >> station is a facility used to communicate with satellites in low Earth >> orbit. Hope this helps to clarify. >> >> The acronym IGP should be expanded. >> >> >> [Yingzhen]: Done. >> >> Section 6. see above my comment on Section >>> >>> [Yingzhen]: Section 6 has been removed. >> >>> >>> >>> -- >>> Tvr mailing list >>> t...@ietf.org >>> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tvr >>> >>
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