Hi Mallory, Many thanks for the review and comments. Rev 19 of the document (just published) incorporates your comments below along with additional comments from Rtgdir early review. Please do let me know if you see anything else outstanding.
Thanks, Neeraj From: Mallory Knodel via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> Date: Thursday, November 16, 2023 at 10:13 AM To: gen-art@ietf.org <gen-art@ietf.org> Cc: b...@ietf.org <b...@ietf.org>, draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb....@ietf.org <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb....@ietf.org> Subject: Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18 Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review Date: 16 Nov 2023 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. Major issues: Section 3 as the Solution Overview seems out of step with the remaining sections in that it properly describes the relationships between 4, 5 and 6, but it appears that 7-10 are additional over arching considerations that might benefit from being extracted from the discussion of direct solutions. Suggesting perhaps that 4, 5 and 6 be treated under the solution space, whereas the remaining substantive sections 7-10 be presented as additional considerations and tradeoffs but not direct descriptions of full solutions to the problems outlined in the introduction. Minor issues: Not all acronyms are properly expanded in order of their first-time use which hinders readability. Seems 12. Operational Considerations is superfluous and plenty of document dependencies also do not have this section. Nits/editorial comments: The focus of my review did not expose any nits/editorial comments though I believe there are some that have persisted across the various versions that I compared and I would encourage the authors to do a full copy edit ahead of IESG submission.
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