Hi Mallory, Many thanks for the review. Will update the draft and respond by next week.
Thanks, Neeraj On Thu, Nov 16, 2023 at 10:13 AM Mallory Knodel via Datatracker < nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > Reviewer: Mallory Knodel > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. Please resolve these > comments along with any other comments you may receive. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. > > Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb > Reviewer: Mallory Knodel > Review Date: 16 Nov 2023 > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be fixed before publication. > > Major issues: Section 3 as the Solution Overview seems out of step with the > remaining sections in that it properly describes the relationships between > 4, 5 > and 6, but it appears that 7-10 are additional over arching considerations > that > might benefit from being extracted from the discussion of direct solutions. > Suggesting perhaps that 4, 5 and 6 be treated under the solution space, > whereas > the remaining substantive sections 7-10 be presented as additional > considerations and tradeoffs but not direct descriptions of full solutions > to > the problems outlined in the introduction. > > Minor issues: Not all acronyms are properly expanded in order of their > first-time use which hinders readability. Seems 12. Operational > Considerations > is superfluous and plenty of document dependencies also do not have this > section. > > Nits/editorial comments: The focus of my review did not expose any > nits/editorial comments though I believe there are some that have persisted > across the various versions that I compared and I would encourage the > authors > to do a full copy edit ahead of IESG submission. > > > _______________________________________________ > BESS mailing list > b...@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess >
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