Meral, thanks for your review! Sean, thanks for your response to Meral’s comments. I have ballotted yes.
Alissa > On Mar 16, 2017, at 8:43 PM, Meral Shirazipour > <meral.shirazip...@ericsson.com> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the > IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call > comments. > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>>. > > > Document: draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2017-03-16 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-20 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13 > > > Summary: > This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have > comments. > > Major issues: > Minor issues: > Nits/editorial comments: > -[Page 3] "an other hardware has"---->"and other hardware have" > -[Page 4], the word "subprotocol" was not clear to me. Would it be possible > to add in parenthesis a few example for protocol and subprotocol? > -[Page 4], "an WebRTC"--->""a WebRTC" > -[Page 7], "Interactive Connectivty"--->"Interactive Connectivity" > -General: please spell out acronyms at first use > -General: the writing (or perhaps lack of punctuation) in this draft made it > hard to read. Please consider reviewing it especially if the draft is > intended as Standards Track. > > > > Best Regards, > Meral > --- > Meral Shirazipour > Ericsson Research > www.ericsson.com <http://www.ericsson.com/>
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