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Document: draft-ietf-hip-reload-instance-08 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 26 September 2013 IETF LC End Date: 30 September 2013 IETF Telechat Date: N/A Summary: The document is well written, and ready for publication, with some minor editorial nits that I ask the authors to consider fixing. Major Issues: None Minor Issues: None Nits/editorial comments: Abstract: ------------ Q_A_1: I would suggest to modify "is the" to "specifies the". Section 1: ------------- Q_1_1: In the abstract the text says "Host Identity Protocol-Based Overlay Networking Environment (HIP BONE)", and in Section 1 the text says "HIP BONE (Host Identify Protocol-Based Overlay Networking Environment)". I suggest to be consistent. Q_1_2: Throughout the document, you talk about "RELOAD HIP BONE". For that reason, I suggest to expand: "This document addresses all the previous items and provides additional details needed to built RELOAD-based HIP BONEs." ...to: "This document addresses all the previous items and provides additional details needed to built RELOAD-based HIP BONEs, referred to as RELOAD HIP BONEs." Section 3: ------------- Q_3_1: I suggest to modify: "The peer protocol to be used is RELOAD, which is specified in [I-D.ietf-p2psip-base]." ...to: "The peer protocol to be used is RELOAD [I-D.ietf-p2psip-base]." Q_3_2: Please expand RELOAD on first occurrence (outside the abstract). Section 4: ------------- Q_4_1: Please expand ORCHID on first occurrence. Section 5: ------------- Q_5_1: I suggest to remove "defined in Section 6.5 of [I-D.ietf-p2psip-base]", as you already state this in Section 3.
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