Quoting Keng-Yu Lin (ken...@lexical.tw): > Thanks for the suggestion. I modified the description as below.I hope > that it is better explained and understandable. > > Package: wnpp > Severity: wishlist > Owner: "Keng-Yu Lin" <ken...@lexical.tw> > > * Package name : urfkill > Version : 0.2.0 > Upstream Author : Gary Lin <g...@suse.com> > * URL : http://www.freedesktop.org/wiki/Software/urfkill > * License : GPL, LGPL > Programming Lang: C > Description : wireless killswitch management daemon for laptops > > urfkill daemon provides the management of the rfkill-related hotkeys > and the killswitches in a more configurable way for the common RF > devices, e.g. WiFi, Bluetooth, WWan, etc. urfkill handles the various > key codes (KEY_WLAN, KEY_BLUETOOTH, KEY_RFKILL, etc) > and toggles the killswitches based on a pre-defined policy.
Maybe just avoid starting sentences with "urfkill" as it is always wierd to have sentences beginning with a lowercase letter. A common trick is using "The <foo> program|daemon". Also avoid "e.g." which is a latinism that's too often used in English..:). I propose parenthesis...another option would be using "such as". Replace "etc." with an ellipsis (...) as it avoids the tricky use of a dot before and after a closing parenthesis. That would give: The urfkill daemon allow managins the rfkill-related hotkeys and the killswitches in a more configurable way for the common RF devices (WiFi, Bluetooth, WWan...). It handles the various key codes (KEY_WLAN, KEY_BLUETOOTH, KEY_RFKILL, etc) and toggles the killswitches based on a pre-defined policy. --
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