Branden wrote: > On Tue, Oct 29, 2002 at 10:47:06PM +0100, Mika Fischer wrote: > > --- > > The UnrealIRCd Team reserves the right to modify this agreement at anytime > > as > > long as notice is given on the unrealircd.com main page at least 24 hours > > before changes take effect. The modified agreement will only effect new > > downloads, downloads completed before the new agreement takes effect will > > still be governed by the agreement that was accepted by the end user at the > > original time of download. > > --- > > > > If the last paragraph of the original EULA was changed to this one, would > > there be any more problems? > > I see a comma splice; they need to change that last comma to a > semicolon.[1] > > > [1] Yes, it's a minor point, but poor grammar degrades clarity. One > wants clarity in legal language even more than in regular conversation.
I'd agree about clarity so I feel I should point this out too: the first 'effect' is wrong it should be 'affect': > > The modified agreement will only affect new downloads, downloads > > completed before the new agreement takes effect will still be governed > > by the agreement that was accepted by the end user at the original > > time of download. (otherwise the modified agreement would be causing new downloads, not specifying things about them). HTH [ It's possible that this is different in American English - much as they don't distinguish beteen 'ensure' (make sure) and 'insure' (buy insurance), using 'insure' for both? In which case if the EULA is written by/for Americans then it would be correct, but would be wrong if considered in British English. ] Wookey -- Aleph One Ltd, Bottisham, CAMBRIDGE, CB5 9BA, UK Tel +44 (0) 1223 811679 work: http://www.aleph1.co.uk/ play: http://www.chaos.org.uk/~wookey/
