> Le 2 octobre 2017 à 10:55, "ChangZhuo Chen (陳昌倬)" <czc...@debconf.org> a
> écrit :
>
>
> On Sun, Oct 01, 2017 at 08:48:04PM -0400, znot...@mailbox.org wrote:
> >
> > [snip]
> >
> > Would it be possible to have the document as an attachment? I could copy
> > that, edit the copy, > >
>
> No problem. See attachment.
>
>
I've a couple of suggestions. Nothing was technically wrong grammatically. I
just think these suggestions help readability. See the attached diff.
Comments are always welcome.
Thanks,
--
znoteer
znot...@mailbox.org
--- email-template-en.txt 2017-10-02 11:50:21.000000000 -0400
+++ email-template-en.znoteer.txt 2017-10-02 12:10:28.763295181 -0400
@@ -1,4 +1,4 @@
-Subject: <sponsor> sponsorship of Debian Conference, July ~ August 2018 in Hsinchu
+Subject: <sponsor> sponsorship of Debian Conference, July-August 2018 in Hsinchu, Taiwan
CC: spons...@debconf.org
---- DONT FORGET TO ATTACH THE FLYER TO THIS MAIL ----
@@ -7,20 +7,19 @@
Hi <sponsor contact>,
<I was given your name and email address by <referral> as the person
-to contact> <I discovered your name in search for contacts>
+to contact> <I discovered your name in my search for contacts>
regarding possible sponsorship of the next annual Debian developers'
conference, "DebConf18". <Maybe a reason why we think they'd be
interested in sponsoring, e.g. do they use Debian?>
-DebConf18 will take place in Hsinchu, Taiwan during July ~ August 2018
+DebConf18 will take place in Hsinchu, Taiwan from 29 July to 5 August 2018
(see https://debconf18.debconf.org). We're now starting the
fundraising campaign and wondered if <sponsor> might be interested
in participating.
-It goes without saying that we are offering several perks and
-recognition in return. You can find a summary of these perks in the
-flyer attached to this mail. More details are available in our
-sponsorship brochure:
+It goes without saying that we are offering recognition and several perks
+in return. You can find a summary in the flyer attached to this mail. More
+details are available in our sponsorship brochure:
https://media.debconf.org/dc18/fundraising/debconf18_sponsorship_brochure_en.pdf
Please also feel free to contact us with any questions.
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