On Fri, Oct 12, 2012 at 01:48:14PM +0100, Noah Slater wrote: > Edits highlighted.
Would you mind not preceding clean text with > ? It looks like quoted text when I'm reading it in email. Thanks. > The "Apache Incubator" is a TLP of the ASF. We should use it's full name. Changed to use its full name, but added text so we define ASF up-front. > > In addition to the official source code release, the project has also > > made convenience binaries available on the Apache CloudStack download > > page. > > > > Above para is not needed. I disagree, strongly. We supply the convenience binaries for a reason. That's because quite a few users won't want to compile from source - we should make sure it's obvious that we do supply binaries, even though source is the official release. > I would actually move this to the top of the email. It is our call to > action. Why burry it? We haven't yet established for most users 1) what CloudStack is or 2) why they should care about 4.0.0-incubating. > Announcements are for users as much as they are for PR/AR. Yes, and they're as much for users who don't know what CloudStack is or why they should download it just because they've crossed paths with an announcement that says it's out. Clean draft v.3 in a sec. Best, Joe -- Joe Brockmeier Twitter: @jzb http://dissociatedpress.net/
