Hi Madison, all,
Thank you for the follow-up.
The nit reported as part of item (1) in my previous message is still not fixed:
"shows an examples" should be "shows an example". Please fix that one.
Please see inline.
Cheers,
Med
> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Madison Church <mchu...@staff.rfc-editor.org>
> Envoyé : lundi 21 avril 2025 21:20
> À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucad...@orange.com>;
> Clyde Wildes <cl...@clydewildes.com>; Joe Clarke
> <jcla...@cisco.com>; Mahesh Jethanandani <mjethanand...@gmail.com>;
> kirankoushik.agraharasreeniv...@verizonwireless.com
> Cc : Warren Kumari <war...@kumari.net>; RFC Editor <rfc-editor@rfc-
> editor.org>; netmod-...@ietf.org; netmod-cha...@ietf.org;
> kwat...@juniper.net; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org
> Objet : Re: [AD] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9742 <draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-
> model-33> for your review
>
> Hi Med,
>
> Thank you for your reply and additional feedback! We have updated
> the document accordingly. Please see comments inline.
>
> 1) For (2),
> > (2) There are actually no messages shown in that figure
> >
> > CURRENT:
> > Syslog consists of originators and collectors. The following
> diagram
> > shows syslog messages flowing from originators to collectors
> where
> > filtering can take place.
>
> Would the solution be to remove this sentence entirely? Or should
> it be replaced with new text (i.e., replace "syslog messages" with
> "syslog processing flow" per the title of Figure 1)?
>
> Perhaps:
> Syslog consists of originators and collectors. The following
> diagram
> shows the syslog processing flow from originators to collectors
> where
> filtering can take place.
>
[Med] Deal! Thanks.
> 2) For (3),
> > (3) Stale/Redundant text:
> >
> > CURRENT:
> > A syslog message is processed if:
> >
> > A syslog message is processed if there is an element
> > of facility-list (F, S) where
> > the message facility matches F,
> > the message severity matches S,
> > and/or the message text matches the regex pattern (if it
> > is present)
> >
> > I guess one of "A syslog message is processed if" mentions should
> be deleted.
>
> We have removed the first instance of "A syslog message is
> processed if" (outside of the sourcecode element).
>
[Med] ACK.
> 3) Regarding the following:
> > (5) Normative references
> >
> > I see that RFC9000 is added as a normative reference, while this
> should.
[Med] argh. I meant "should not" per the guidance provided below.
Please refer to RFC8407bis which has the guidance to follow
> here:
> >
> > Note: [RFC8341] (or a future RFC that replaces it) MUST be
> listed as
> > normative references.
> >
> > By default, [RFC4252], [RFC6241], [RFC8040], [RFC8446],
> [RFC9000],
> > and RFC AAAA (or future RFCs that replace any of them) are
> listed
> > as informative references unless normatively cited in other
> > sections of the document that specifies the YANG module.
> >
> > Please update the references accordingly.
>
> Thank you for pointing this out. We have removed RFC 8407 as a
> normative reference and replaced it with rfc8407bis as an
> informative reference. Let us know if this was your intention.
[Med] Thanks for fixing that one. We need to fix these following as well to
adhere with the guidance above:
[RFC4252] Ylonen, T. and C. Lonvick, Ed., "The Secure Shell (SSH)
Authentication Protocol", RFC 4252, DOI 10.17487/RFC4252,
January 2006, <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc4252>.
[RFC6241] Enns, R., Ed., Bjorklund, M., Ed., Schoenwaelder, J., Ed.,
and A. Bierman, Ed., "Network Configuration Protocol
(NETCONF)", RFC 6241, DOI 10.17487/RFC6241, June 2011,
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc6241>.
[RFC8040] Bierman, A., Bjorklund, M., and K. Watsen, "RESTCONF
Protocol", RFC 8040, DOI 10.17487/RFC8040, January 2017,
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc8040>.
[RFC8446] Rescorla, E., "The Transport Layer Security (TLS) Protocol
Version 1.3", RFC 8446, DOI 10.17487/RFC8446, August 2018,
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc8446>.
[RFC9000] Iyengar, J., Ed. and M. Thomson, Ed., "QUIC: A UDP-Based
Multiplexed and Secure Transport", RFC 9000,
DOI 10.17487/RFC9000, May 2021,
<https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc9000>.
Please move all those to be listed as Informative. Thank you.
>
> Please review the updates and let us know if you approve as AD.
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> RFC Editor/mc
>
> > Thank you.
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Med
> >
> >> -----Message d'origine-----
> >> De : Warren Kumari <war...@kumari.net> Envoyé : mercredi 16
> avril
> >> 2025 23:11 À : Madison Church <mchu...@staff.rfc-editor.org>;
> >> BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucad...@orange.com> Cc :
> Clyde
> >> Wildes <cl...@clydewildes.com>; Joe Clarke <jcla...@cisco.com>;
> >> Mahesh Jethanandani <mjethanand...@gmail.com>;
> >> kirankoushik.agraharasreeniv...@verizonwireless.com; RFC Editor
> >> <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org>; netmod-...@ietf.org; netmod-
> >> cha...@ietf.org; kwat...@juniper.net; auth48archive@rfc-
> editor.org
> >> Objet : Re: [AD] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9742 <draft-ietf-netmod-
> >> syslog-model-33> for your review
> >>
> >>
> >> [ + Med ]
> >> I believe that this is fine (and good!), but I'm adding Med as
> the
> >> current OpsAD for formal approval.
> >>
> >> W
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> On Mon, Apr 14, 2025 at 11:22 AM, Madison Church <
> >> mchu...@staff.rfc-editor.org> wrote:
> >>
> >>> Hi Authors, *Warren,
> >>>
> >>> Authors - Thank you for your replies! We have noted your
> >> approvals on
> >>> the
> >>> AUTH48 status page (see
> >>
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> >>>
> >>> *Warren - As Responsible AD for this document, please review
> and
> >>> approve the following addition to the Normative References as
> per
> >>> https:// datatracker.ietf.org/doc/
> >>> statement-iesg-guidelines-for-the-use-of-formal-languages-in-
> >> ietf-specifications-20011001/.
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> [W3C.REC-xml-20081126]
> >>> Bray, T., Paoli, J., Sperberg-McQueen, C.M., Maler, E., and F.
> >>> Yergeau, "Extensible Markup Language (XML) 1.0 (Fifth
> Edition)",
> >> World
> >>> Wide Web Consortium Recommendation REC-xml-20081126, November
> >> 2008,
> >>>
> >>
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> >>
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> >>>
> >>> Thank you,
> >>> RFC Editor/mc
> >>>
> >>> On Apr 13, 2025, at 2:00 PM, Clyde Wildes
> <cl...@clydewildes.com>
> >> wrote:
> >>>
> >>> Madison,
> >>>
> >>> Approved from me!
> >>>
> >>> Thanks,
> >>>
> >>> Clyde
> >>>
> >>> On Mar 19, 2025, at 8:56 AM, Madison Church
> >>> <mchu...@staff.rfc-editor.org>
> >>> wrote:
> >>>
> >>> Hi Authors,
> >>>
> >>> Joe - Thank you for your reply! We have updated the document as
> >>> requested
> >
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