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Thanks Yang Zhao China Mobile Research Institute From: Sarah Tarrant Date: 2025-02-19 22:25 To: xuyun...@caict.ac.cn; zhaoyang...@chinamobile.com; dieter.bel...@nokia.com CC: Linyi (Yi); rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org; teas-...@ietf.org; teas-cha...@ietf.org; vbee...@juniper.net; james.n.guich...@futurewei.com; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org; Zhenghaomian Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9730 <draft-ietf-teas-gmpls-controller-inter-work-17> for your review Authors, This is a friendly reminder that we have yet to hear back from some of you regarding this document’s readiness for publication. Please review the AUTH48 status page (http://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9730) for further information and the previous messages in this thread for pertinent communication. Thank you, RFC Editor/st > On Feb 12, 2025, at 10:30 AM, Sarah Tarrant <starr...@staff.rfc-editor.org> > wrote: > > Hi Yi, > > Thank you for your reply. 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We have marked your approval on the AUTH48 status >> page for this document (see https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9730). >> >> We will assume your assent to any further changes submitted by your >> coauthors unless we hear objection at that time. >> >> We will await approvals from each of the parties listed at the AUTH48 status >> page prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. >> >> Thank you, >> RFC Editor/st >> >>> On Feb 6, 2025, at 1:58 AM, Zhenghaomian <zhenghaom...@huawei.com> wrote: >>> >>> Dear RFC editors, >>> >>> Thank you for the work, I reviewed the changes and approve the publication. >>> >>> Best wishes, >>> Haomian >>> >>> -----邮件原件----- >>> 发件人: Sarah Tarrant <starr...@staff.rfc-editor.org> >>> 发送时间: 2025年2月6日 4:38 >>> 收件人: Zhenghaomian <zhenghaom...@huawei.com> >>> 抄送: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org; xuyun...@caict.ac.cn; >>> zhaoyang...@chinamobile.com; dieter.bel...@nokia.com; Linyi (Yi) >>> <yi....@huawei.com>; teas-...@ietf.org; teas-cha...@ietf.org; >>> vbee...@juniper.net; james.n.guich...@futurewei.com; >>> auth48archive@rfc-editor.org >>> 主题: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9730 >>> <draft-ietf-teas-gmpls-controller-inter-work-17> for your review >>> >>> Hi Haomian, >>> >>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the document accordingly >>> >>> Please review the document carefully to ensure satisfaction as we do not >>> make changes once it has been published as an RFC. 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Could you please help integrate it into the XML? >>>> >>>> Best wishes, >>>> Haomian (on behalf of authors & contributors) >>>> >>>> -----邮件原件----- >>>> 发件人: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org <rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org> >>>> 发送时间: 2025年1月30日 7:08 >>>> 收件人: Zhenghaomian <zhenghaom...@huawei.com>; xuyun...@caict.ac.cn; >>>> zhaoyang...@chinamobile.com; dieter.bel...@nokia.com; Linyi (Yi) >>>> <yi....@huawei.com> >>>> 抄送: rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org; teas-...@ietf.org; >>>> teas-cha...@ietf.org; vbee...@juniper.net; >>>> james.n.guich...@futurewei.com; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org >>>> 主题: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9730 >>>> <draft-ietf-teas-gmpls-controller-inter-work-17> for your review >>>> >>>> Authors, >>>> >>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) >>>> the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>>> >>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear >>>> in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> [Haomian] >>>> please help adding keywords: architecture, ACTN, control plane. >>>> >>>> 2) <!--[rfced] To make a 1:1 matchup between the acronyms and their >>>> expansions, may we remove "protocol" from the definitions below? >>>> >>>> Original: >>>> IS-IS Intermediate System to Intermediate System protocol >>>> ... >>>> OSPF Open Shortest Path First protocol >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> IS-IS: Intermediate System to Intermediate System >>>> ... >>>> OSPF: Open Shortest Path First >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] Yes, please remove the 'protocol'. >>>> >>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] To match Section 3.2, may we add a reference to RFC 7950 >>>> after "YANG" in the following sentence in Section 3.3? >>>> >>>> Additionally, as "/" can mean "and", "or", or "and/or", may we update the >>>> text for clarity? >>>> >>>> Current: >>>> For domain 1, the network elements were not enabled with GMPLS so >>>> the control is purely from the controller, via Network Configuration >>>> Protocol (NETCONF) [RFC6241] / YANG and/or PCE Communication Protocol >>>> (PCEP) [RFC5440]. >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> For domain 1, the network elements were not enabled with GMPLS, so >>>> the control is purely from the controller, via Network Configuration >>>> Protocol >>>> (NETCONF) [RFC6241], YANG [RFC7950], and/or PCE Communication >>>> Protocol (PCEP) [RFC5440]. >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] if we look at the figure 1, NETCONF/YANG ("/" means "and" here) >>>> is one option while PCEP is another, but the proposal text seems there are >>>> 3 options. How about following? >>>> NEW >>>> For domain 1, the network elements were not enabled with GMPLS, so >>>> the control is purely from the controller, via Network Configuration >>>> Protocol >>>> (NETCONF) [RFC6241] with YANG [RFC7950] data model, and/or PCE >>>> Communication Protocol (PCEP) [RFC5440]. >>>> >>>> 4) <!--[rfced] To clarify "label inter-domain information", may we update >>>> the text as follows? >>>> >>>> Original: >>>> Once the orchestrator(MD) has >>>> computed the E2E path, RSVP-TE or PCEP can be used in the different >>>> domains to set up the related segment tunnel consisting of label >>>> inter-domain information... >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> Once the orchestrator(MD) has >>>> computed the E2E path, RSVP-TE or PCEP can be used in the different >>>> domains to set up the related segment tunnel consisting of >>>> information about inter-domain labels... >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] Yes this is more clear. >>>> >>>> 5) <!--[rfced] In the following sentence, is the intention that any >>>> topology-related YANG module can be used? Or should a specific >>>> topology-related YANG module be cited here? >>>> >>>> Original: >>>> If the resources of inter-domain links are managed by the >>>> orchestrator(MD), each domain controller can provide to the >>>> orchestrator(MD) the list of available labels (e.g. timeslots if OTN >>>> is the scenario) using the IETF Topology YANG model and related >>>> technology specific extension. >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> If the resources of inter-domain links are managed by the >>>> Orchestrator(MD), each domain controller can provide to the >>>> Orchestrator(MD) the list of available labels (e.g., time slots if >>>> the OTN is the scenario) using a topology-related YANG module and a >>>> specific technology-related extension. >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] The YANG module to be used depends on the network switching >>>> technology, I think the proposed text this is more clear, but I prefer to >>>> make it plural. >>>> NEW: >>>> If the resources of inter-domain links are managed by the >>>> Orchestrator(MD), each domain controller can provide to the >>>> Orchestrator(MD) the list of available labels (e.g., time slots if >>>> the OTN is the scenario) using topology-related YANG modules and >>>> specific technology-related extensions. >>>> >>>> 6) <!-- [rfced] Table 1: Note that we converted the text table into >>>> <table> format. It seems the notes related to the dotted boxes (in the >>>> original text table) appear in the bulleted list after the table. We have >>>> updated the table and notes slightly to fit with the updated <table> >>>> format. >>>> Please review and let us know if any corrections are needed. >>>> >>>> In addition, may we remove "(Not applicable)" from the table header, as it >>>> seems redundant with the text that follows? >>>> >>>> Current: >>>> Single PCE (Not applicable) >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> Single PCE >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] I am good with the change. >>>> >>>> 7) <!--[rfced] To improve readability, may we update this sentence as >>>> follows? >>>> >>>> Original: >>>> These two models are still possible to be used, although they are >>>> not the main methods. >>>> >>>> Perhaps: >>>> It is still possible to use these two models, although they are not >>>> the main methods. >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] I am good with the change. >>>> >>>> 8) <!-- [rfced] It appears that [YANG-TE] (draft-ietf-teas-yang-te) does >>>> not have a Section 3.3.2. Please review and let us know how this citation >>>> should be updated. >>>> >>>> Current: >>>> The Orchestrator(ML) is responsible to decide the creation of H-LSP >>>> in the lower-layer network if it acts as a VNTM. Then it requests >>>> the L-Controller to create the H-LSP via, for example, MPI interface >>>> under the ACTN architecture. See Section 3.3.2 of [YANG-TE]. >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] I see [YANG-TE] removed the original 3.3.2 about "Tunnel >>>> hierarchical link endpoint", so I would propose to remove the last >>>> sentence and citation. >>>> >>>> 9) <!-- [rfced] FYI - For reference [G.808.1], we added the URL: >>>> https://www.itu.int/rec/T-REC-G.808.1-201405-I/en. Please let us know if >>>> there is any objection. >>>> >>>> Original: >>>> [G.808.1] ITU-T, "Generic protection switching - Linear trail and >>>> subnetwork protection", G.808.1, May 2014. >>>> >>>> Current: >>>> [G.808.1] ITU-T, "Generic protection switching - Linear trail and >>>> subnetwork protection", ITU-T Recommendation G.808.1, May >>>> 2014, <https://www.itu.int/rec/T-REC-G.808.1-201405-I/en>. >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] I am good with the change. >>>> >>>> 10) <!--[rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for the following >>>> abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please >>>> review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. >>>> >>>> Link State Advertisement (LSA) >>>> Representational State Transfer (REST) >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] Yes these are correct. >>>> >>>> 11) <!-- [rfced] Terminology >>>> >>>> a) We have received guidance from Benoit Claise and the YANG Doctors that >>>> "YANG module" and "YANG data model" are preferred. We have updated the >>>> text to use these forms. Please review. >>>> >>>> b) Should instances of "LMP protocol" be updated to simply read "LMP" to >>>> avoid redundancy (if expanded, "LMP protocol" would read "Link Management >>>> Protocol protocol")? >>>> >>>> c) Similarly, should instances of "MPI interface" be updated to simply >>>> read "MPI" >>>> (if expanded, "MPI interface" would read "MDSC to PNC Interface >>>> interface")? >>>> --> >>>> [Haomian] I am good with all the 3 changes above. >>>> >>>> 12) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of >>>> the online Style Guide >>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> >>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. 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