Or, you could just say “on each anniversary of eir registration”, which is a lot clearer, IMO.
-Aris On Sat, Dec 15, 2018 at 1:52 PM ATMunn <[email protected]> wrote: > I think that's the exact same as the first one? Sorry if I wasn't clear. > I wasn't making a suggestion of what it should be changed to, I was > showing the weirdness. > > I think just getting moving the "if" to before the "when" should work. > > On 12/15/2018 4:22 PM, Reuben Staley wrote: > > ttttpf > > > > On 12/15/18 2:21 PM, Reuben Staley wrote: > >> I retract the last one and submit this one: > >> > >> Title: Happy Birthday To You Author: Trigon Coauthors: ATMunn AI: > >> 1 > >> > >> Enact a new rule entitled "Birthday Gifts", power=1, with the > >> text: It is considered to be a player's Agoran Birthday when on > >> the Agoran day e registered, if it is also a different Agoran > >> year. Exactly once each time it is a player's Agoran Birthday, any > >> other player CAN grant em 3 coins by announcement. > >> > >> Players SHOULD announce their Agoran Birthdays. > >> > >> On 12/15/18 2:10 PM, ATMunn wrote: > >>> The first sentence doesn't seem to make sense grammatically. "It > >>> is considered ... when on the Agoran day e registered, if ..." > >>> > >>> On 12/15/2018 3:09 PM, Reuben Staley wrote: > >>>> I am not sure if this is better, but whatever. > >>>> > >>>> I submit the following proposal. > >>>> > >>>> Title: Happy Birthday To You Author: Trigon Coauthors: AI: 1 > >>>> > >>>> Enact a new rule entitled "Birthday Gifts", power=1, with the > >>>> text: > >>>> > >>>> It is considered to be a player's Agoran Birthday when on the > >>>> Agoran day e registered, if it is also a different Agoran > >>>> year. Exactly once each time it is a player's Agoran Birthday, > >>>> any other player CAN grant em 3 coins by announcement. > >>>> > >>>> Players SHOULD announce their Agoran Birthdays. > >>>> > >> > > >
