On Sun, Nov 23, 2008 at 8:50 PM, Ed Murphy <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Amend Rule 2186 (Victory) by replacing this text: > > Winning Conditions and Losing Conditions exist only as defined > by rules. > > with this text: > > A Winning (Losing) Condition is a condition defined as such by > the rules.
Confusing. > > and by replacing this text: > > This is the only way to win the game > > with this text: > > The game CANNOT otherwise be won Why? > > Amend Rule 2177 (The Senate) by replacing this text: > > The collection of Senators is the Senate. > > with this text: > > The Senate is the set of all Senators. > Ugly. > Amend Rule 1681 (The Logical Rulesets) by replacing this text: > > There is a format of the ruleset known as the Short Logical > Ruleset (SLR). > > with this text: > > The Short Logical Ruleset (SLR) is a format of the ruleset. Ditto, same for the FLR. > Amend Rule 2150 (Personhood) by replacing this text: > > A person is an entity that has the general capacity to be the > subject of rights and obligations under the rules. An entity is > a person if and only if it is defined to be so by rules with > power 2 or greater. > > with this text: > > A person is an entity defined as such by the rules. Defining an > entity as a person is secured, with a power threshold of 2. A > person CAN generally be the subject of rights and obligations > under the rules. Why not 'defined as such by rules with power >= 2'? > Amend Rule 2166 (Assets) by replacing this text: > > A class of assets is public if its backing document is a rule or > a public contract; otherwise it is private. > > with this text: > > A public class of assets is a class of assets whose backing > document is a rule or a public contract. All others are private. Ugly. > Amend Rule 1750 (Read the Ruleset Week) by replacing this text: > > The first Agoran week each year which falls entirely in February > is Read the Ruleset Week. > > with this text: > > Read the Ruleset Week is the first Agoran week each year that > falls entirely in February. Ditto. > Amend Rule 2164 (Judicial Self-Recusal and Case Transfer) by replacing > this text: > > If e has been assigned to the case for at > least four days, such a recusal is with cause. > > with this text: > > Such a recusal is with cause if and only > if e has been assigned to the case for at least four days. Ditto. > > Amend Rule 591 (Inquiry Cases) by replacing this text: > > There is a subclass of judicial case known as an inquiry case. > > with this text: > > Inquiry cases are a subclass of judicial cases. Ditto, same for the other subclasses. > Amend Rule 2145 (Partnerships) by replacing this text: > > A binding agreement governed by the rules which devolves its > legal obligations onto a subset of its parties, numbering at > least two, collectively, is a partnership. > > with this text: > > A partnership is a contract that devolves its legal obligations > onto at least two of its parties. Why drop "collectively"? > Amend Rule 402 (Identity of the Speaker) by replacing "The Speaker is" > with "The office of Speaker is held by". Why? I whole-heartedly agree with the unquoted changes (about half of the proposal), but I think some of these changes reduce, not increase, clarity.
