Roger Hicks wrote: >A Magnate is a type of entity. Add "An entity is not a Magnate unless the rules specify that it is."
>not owned by a Magnate, it > >becomes owned by the Agoran Treasury. The Magnate that owns a Property has Bogus paragraph breaks in several places. >Transfer Notice must clearly identify the following information: >* The Magnate who owns the Property or Properties in question That's required to be the sender of the Transfer Notice, so it's redundant to require it in the Notice. You should consider what happens if a Property is (purportedly) transferred to its current owner. Presently your proto is self-contradictory in that situation. >When this Proposal passes, $10,000 shall be created and given to each >registered Player who is a natural person. "and given to" would be better as "owned by". >At the beginning of each week, the Agoran Treasury pays the holder of each >Agoran Office an amount of Currency equal to the Salary amount of that >Office. Before or after the beginning-of-week taxation? Also, specifying a sequence for the salary payments will become important if the Treasury ever runs out of currency. >Create a rule titled "Bankrupcy" with Power of 1 and this text: "Bankruptcy". >1. All Property owned by Magnate is transferred to the Agoran Treasury. Seems a bit harsh to become bankrupt over a debt of one Agoran Peppercorn and lose $50000 plus one's land. >A Player who performs one of the following actions without being certified >for that action has er Voting Limit on Ordinary Proposals reduced by two: Can VLOP go negative? >allows a Player to perform one specific action. "type of", surely. > The holder of a Certificate may exercise the action >specified in the certificate freely It can still be constrained by other rules, or by binding agreements. >Certain activities are regulated under Agoran law. These activities may only >be conducted by an Agoran Player who holds a license for that activity. All sorts of activities are regulated for which you don't create licenses. >Players to purchase, unless otherwise specified in another rule of equal or >higher power. Better to reference "power of this rule" explicitly. > The holder of a Voter's Certificate is certified to submit >ballots on distributed Proposals. Please don't screw up Democratic proposals. >License can (by announcement) may validate a Bill of Sale. "can may" is ungrammatical. >After an Ordinary Proposal is distributed, but before voting ends, any >Player may destroy digits e controls corresponding to the digits in the >number of that proposal If I destroy one of each class of digit then this increases my voting limit on all Ordinary Proposals that are up for vote? >Notice that is inherantly "inherently". -zefram
