I was going to point out everything that Mark did (except I didn't catch "networs", good job). To be honest, I can't tell what's changed from before.
I know the hardest part of doing something like this is figuring out what should be there and getting it written and able to fit. So I think the hard work that has been done is commendable and I really like the result. So the very detailed criticisms below should be seen as simple copyediting that is required to really make the product shine and to keep fickle end-users from disregarding the message and information because it doesn't look "professional". I know we don't have the new Ubuntu font yet (I've been told we should expect it around the end of the month) but I think the new logo and colors should be used. I'm not sure why all the screen shots use the old DarkRoom theme instead of 9.10's default Human theme, but I would have expected that they be updated to use Ambiance for 10.04 LTS. "Brocure" is misspelled in the filename. Is this intentional? It looks unprofessional. "Simple CCSM" finds the right software in Ubuntu Software Center but in 10.04 LTS it is listed as "Simple CompizConfig Settings Manager" "Flashplayer" refers to "Adobe Flash" or "Adobe Flash Player" and should not be combined into one word. The URLs on the 'back' panel should either include the URI protocol (http://) or not--it shouldn't be random. The title fonts should either be serif or sans-serif, the "How to get Flash, YouTube, Hulu" title is the wrong typeface, size, and style. Section titles switch from "How to" introductions to first-person questions. Reference to searching for "install.exe" files for software is odd, since Windows software uses "setup.exe" Brochure says not to search for and download software on the "Internet" (meaning the World Wide Web), but then recommends "World of Goo", for which users will have to search for, purchase, and download from 2D Boy's website. Under no circumstances should snes9x be a game recommendation. It's not useful 'out of the box' and encourages piracy. It's a Super Nintendo emulator that comes with no games and is useless without legally dumping your personal SNES cartridges with a ROM dumper to your computer (but which is against the license provided with the games) or illegally downloading commercial games from shady websites. (We can pretend they might find legal homebrew projects but I doubt this is likely without further guidance.) Gwibber description doesn't align when it wraps. -- Nathan Haines Ubuntu California Local Community Team -- Ubuntu-us-ca mailing list Ubuntu-us-ca@lists.ubuntu.com Modify settings or unsubscribe at: https://lists.ubuntu.com/mailman/listinfo/ubuntu-us-ca
