Hi Ronnie,

On Thu, 2007-04-12 at 02:06 +0100, Ronnie Tucker wrote:
> Here it is folks!
> 
> fullcircle #0 - FINAL BETA!
> http://files.fullcirclemagazine.org/uploads/issue0_b5.pdf
> 
> added:
> Feisty Fawn Features article (thanks to Phil Bull for the screenshots)
> 
> still to do:
> add KDE and Xfce versions for Feisty
> RELEASE IT!
> 
> Anything you good folks can see wrong with it before it gets released??...

It looks great! I proof read the first 2/3 of it and found the following
(mostly very small) errors or typos:

 * p1 - "Ubuntu 7.04 - Whats Hot" -> "Ubuntu 7.04 - What's Hot"
 * p2 - "Easier Install of Binary Drivers" -> "Easier Installation of
Binary Drivers"
 * p2 - "How to contribute to fullcircle" -> "How to contribute to full
circle" (?)
 * p3 - "For a window manager, Ubuntu used Gnome" -> Gnome=GNOME, and
GNOME is a desktop, not just a window manager.
 * p3 - "Warty Warthog being the first" -> "Warty Warthog was the first"
 * p4 - "its orange and brown" -> "orange and brown"
 * p4 - Final sentence about LiveCD - I think others were offering
LiveCDs, just no major desktop distros.
 * p5 - "dark by todays standards" -> "dark by today's standards"
 * p5 - "LiveCD's for 64-bit" -> "Live CDs for 64-bit"
 * p5 - "Power PC's" -> "PowerPC"
 * p5 - "Kubuntu, this was" -> "Kubuntu. This was"
 * p5 - "Gnome" -> "GNOME"
 * p6 - "squarely at the educational establishments" -> "squarely at
educational establishments" (?)
 * p6 - "(package manager)" -> "(a package manager)"
 * p6 - "became first" -> "became the first"
 * p6 - "Also added was KDE Bluetooth" -> "KDE Bluetooth was also
added" (?)
 * p7 - "half yearly" -> "half-yearly"
 * p7 - "LiveCD" -> "Live CD" (now called Desktop CD)
 * p7 - "hard drives but" -> "hard drives, but"
 * p7 - "could install" -> "could also install"
 * p7 - "Gnome" -> "GNOME"
 * p7 - "resources Xubuntu" -> "resources, Xubuntu"
 * p8 - "F-spot" -> "F-Spot"
 * p8 - "software; digiKam," -> "software (digiKam),"
 * p9 - "codecs, binary drivers" -> "codecs and binary drivers"
 * p9 - "contacts, Yahoo" -> "contacts and Yahoo"
 * p9 - "them in Ubuntu" -> "then into Ubuntu"
 * p9 - "dual partition" -> "dual-boot setup" (?)
 * p9 - "and their strengths" -> "and their signal strengths"
 * p9 - "instantly, via" -> "instantly via"
 * p9 - "local network with no configuration." -> "local network,
without configuration."
 * p10 - "codecs for you, no" -> "codecs for you; no"
 * p11 - "to determine to which" -> "to determine which"
 * p11 - "Othello didn't" -> "Othello, didn't"
 * p12 - The main difference with the new Help Centre is the topic-based
help. Help is now split into bitesize chunks, which are
straight-to-the-point and mean that you don;t have to read pages of
writing to find the instructions you were after.
 * p13 - "Easier install of binary drivers" -> "Easier installation of
binary drivers" (I understand that this may be because of space
restrictions in the layout)
 * p13 - "Manager allow users" -> "Manager allows users"
 * p13 - "manage binary drivers of" -> "manage the binary drivers
of" (?)

Also, there is a large gap on page 3, could it be filled with a release
timeline or some project logos maybe? And before I forget, do you need
me to relicense any of my images or are you OK with the license (IIRC,
CC-BY-SA 2.5)?

Thanks again for your great work,

Phil

-- 
Phil Bull
http://www.launchpad.net/people/philbull


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