I know you're in a rush, and I am not familiar with the evaluation process, but you might want to tone down the language a bit. Understatement can be stronger than overstatement. And numbers speak for themselves.
For example, on page 3 we read that Pynac is "extremely fast". Well, "extremely" is always a matter of opinion, and so this would be stronger if you gave a speed-up rfactor. In the next paragraph on the same page, we read that the PI plans to be "working very hard", this seems a bit superfluous (who would write a proposal to not work hard?). At the end of that paragraph we see that something "will dramatically improve the speed of Sage". Again, "dramatic" is too eye- catching a word, and the sentence would be stronger if it were made quantitative. These are just a few examples of a style that seems to typify the document. Maybe it's fine, but I do think you might want to consider rewriting it. Five minutes could make the document stronger, at least in the eyes of readers such as me. (Note: I am not in the US system, and I am aware that hyperbole is popular there, so perhaps my comment is of no use.) --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ To post to this group, send email to sage-devel@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to sage-devel-unsubscr...@googlegroups.com For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/sage-devel URLs: http://www.sagemath.org -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
