Hi Mahesh,
Thanks for the thorough, and again apologies for the delay.
Please see inline.

    On Monday, January 3, 2022, 04:41:47 PM EST, Mahesh Jethanandani 
<mjethanand...@gmail.com> wrote:  
 
 Hi Authors,
I read through the draft. Thanks for putting together a short and readable 
document.  I had the following comments/questions on the Unsolicited BFD for 
Sessionless Applications draft. Some of the comments are nits, while others are 
a little more substantive. 
Abstract:
I believe that by proposing this solution, you are updating RFC 5880. But the 
Abstract or draft makes no mention of it.<RR> As you may recall, initially this 
document was informational and that got changed when the YANG model got added. 
So in the authors view, at least when we last discussed this, this is an 
implementation addition and not a change to the BFD protocol as specified in 
RFC5880. But if the WG consensus is that we should treat this document as an 
update to RFC5880, that's acceptable to me.
Introduction:
The Abstract mentions that a YANG model is also proposed, but the Introduction 
section does not. I believe a clear mention that the YANG model proposed is a 
YANG 1.1 model (RFC 7950) would be helpful. The fact that the model in NMDA 
compliant can then be mentioned in this section, rather than in Abstract, which 
is as its name suggests - an Abstract. The details should be mentioned in the 
Introduction.<RR> Will add in next rev.

Procedures for Unsolicited BFD & State Variable:
The procedure seems simple enough, although a few more updates would be 
helpful. For example, can a given router be configured both globally and per 
interface? If not, it should be added in the procedure, and a must statement to 
that effect should be added to the YANG model. If both can be supported, then 
there should be an explanation as to which parameters take effect for a given 
session, and if per-interface parameters override global parameters.<RR>Both 
can be supported, will add text specifying that per-interface overrides global.

s/per-router/globally/g just to keep consistency in the text.<RR>Ack.

The third paragraph says “The passive side does not send Control packets”. I 
think you mean to say that the passive side does not send Control packets 
initially or on its own, but does in response to the active side sending 
them.<RR>Will clarify.

In the fifth paragraph it is not clear what “It” means. Does “it" mean the 
active or the passive side? If this paragraph was part of the fourth paragraph 
I could deduce that you are talking about passive side, but since this is a new 
paragraph, it is not clear. Also, I see the use of word “would” in the 
paragraph. Do you mean should, or more precisely SHOULD instead?<RR>It is the 
passive side, will update. Wrt would/should/SHOULD, I think it is MUST because 
of the MAY at the end of the 4th paragraph.

The sixth paragraph makes mention of a configurable parameter, but there is no 
such parameter in the YANG model.<RR>You are referring to the "period of time"? 
I'd rather remove the text which says "which may be configurable" than add this 
in the YANG. Implementations which support this can augment and add the config 
parameter.

The draft mentions an active and passive role towards the end of this section, 
and the beginning of the next section. The next section is titled “State 
Variable”, but there is talk of “configuring" operational mode. State variables 
are not configurable, are ‘config false’, and operational mode is certainly not 
“configured”. I think you mean administrative mode. If so, a separate state 
variable is not required per NMDA, and the same variable will represent both 
admin and operational status. I would drop section 3, and roll the discussion 
of the UnsolictedRole into Section 2, and explain how the UnsolictedRole is 
both configured and its operational status retrieved using NMDA. <RR>By 
operational mode, we are not referring to the operational data in NMDA/YANG 
parlance, instead we mean "mode of operation" of BFD (which is configurable). 
And the state variable was meant to be an addition to RFC 5880 - Bidirectional 
Forwarding Detection (BFD) (so we do update 5880 after all...). I think you are 
right and that this section is confusing.

YANG Data Model:
Who is “We”? Also, please update reference of RFC 9127 to 
draft-ietf-bfd-rfc9127-bis.<RR> We will get rid of the "we" :-) Ack for 
9127-bis.

Unsolicited BFD Hierarchy:
Remove reference to a separate container for operational data. See above 
point.<RR>Which container are you referring to? There is an unsolicited 
container under interfaces and globally for config. There is an unsolicited 
container under single-hop for unsolicited session state.

Unsolicited BFD Module
There is a redundant reference statement right after the Copyright paragraph 
and before the revision statement.<RR>I thought this was standard procedure. 
That's what 9127 has anyway.

In YANG, the parent name is not repeated. Therefore 
s/unsolicted-active/actives/unsolicited-passive/passive<RR>Ack.

YANG Module Security Considerations:
The section highlights the data nodes that are sensitive/vulnerable, but most 
of the nodes it describes as sensitive are imported from RFC 9127. It should 
defer to the Security Considerations of that RFC, unless it is changing those 
variables meaningfully. <RR> It talks about sensitivity of unsolicited specific 
nodes. Which 9127 nodes are you referring to? 

Regards,Reshad.
Thanks.
Mahesh jethanandanimjethanand...@gmail.com





  

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