Hi Gunter, Thanks for the review.
I like your edited text. I adopted it with some very few adjustments as you can see in the diff: https://author-tools.ietf.org/api/iddiff?url_1=https://boucadair.github.io/attachment-circuit-model/draft-ietf-opsawg-ac-lxsm-lxnm-glue.txt&url_2=https://boucadair.github.io/attachment-circuit-model/gunter-edits-iesg-review/draft-ietf-opsawg-ac-lxsm-lxnm-glue.txt > 166 ac: Attachment circuit > > GV> sometimes the AC is upper case (e.g. AC-glue, etc) and > sometimes lower case > (i.e. ac-ntw-ref, etc). Is this intetional? This intentional. Upper case is used in the narrative/description text, while lower case is used when it appears in a data node identifier. 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I have few non-blocking > editorial comments > > #DETAILED COMMENTS > #================= > > 18 The document specifies a module that updates existing > service (i.e., > 19 the Layer 2 Service Model (L2SM) and the Layer 3 > Service Model > 20 (L3SM)) and network (i.e., the Layer 2 Network Model > (L2NM) and the > 21 Layer 3 Network Model (L3NM)) Virtual Private Network > (VPN) modules > 22 with the required information to bind specific VPN > services to > 23 attachment circuits (ACs) that are created using the > AC service > 24 ("ietf-ac-svc") and network ("ietf-ac-ntw") models. > > GV> While correct, I did find this abstract not so easy to digest > and i saw no > correlation with the proposed "AC-glue" model. What about the > following > alterative. Maybe > > " > This document defines a YANG data model, referred to as the "AC- > Glue" model, to > augment the LxSM and LxNM with references to Attachment Circuits > (ACs). The > AC-Glue model enables a provider to associate configured Layer 2 > and Layer 3 > VPN services (LxVPN) with the underlying AC infrastructure, > thereby > facilitating consistent provisioning and management of new or > existing ACs in > conjunction with LxVPN services. By introducing an integrated > approach to AC > and LxVPN management, this model supports an Attachment Circuit- > as-a-Service > (ACaaS) paradigm and provides a standardized mechanism for > aligning AC requests > with the network configurations required to deliver them. " > > 166 ac: Attachment circuit > > GV> sometimes the AC is upper case (e.g. AC-glue, etc) and > sometimes lower case > (i.e. ac-ntw-ref, etc). Is this intetional? > > Many thanks again for this document, > > Kind Regards, > Gunter Van de Velde, > RTG AD > > ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. 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