Dear authors, dear shepherd, dear WG, As the Int-area WG chairs have requested the publication of this IETF draft, I have done my usual AD review of it. Before processing with the publication (i.e., the IETF Last Call), I am requesting a reply or an action on all the points below.
Special note for Luigi: a very detailed and crystal-clear shepherd write-up! Thank you for the work done, such documents are not easy to write. I have also appreciated that the flow and table of content is really similar to RFC 7042. Regards -éric # Section 1 ` Descriptions herein of [http://www.iana.org/] policies and procedures are authoritative` should s/authoritative/normative/ ? In the same sentence, I also think that the equivalent text in RFC 7042 is more explanatory about IANA policies (by specifying which registries). Or move this 2nd paragraph *after* the third one ? # Section 1.2 Should this section be removed by the RFC editor upon publication ? Or moved to an appendix ? # Section 1.3 If there is a stable URL for " IEEE Registration Authority site", should it be added as a reference ? # Section 2.1 I find " 4 1/2 octets (36 bits)" not easy to parse, what about "4.5 octets (36 bits)" ? # Section 2.1.1 How can the reader check whether " the IEEE 802 Structured Local Address Plan (SLAP) is in effect" ? # Section 2.1.3 s/Currently/In 2023/ ? # Section 2.2.1 AFAIK, EUI-64 based IPv6 addresses are not officially deprecated (only recommended not to be used by RFC 8064). # Section 2.2.2 Rather than using "02 bit" term, why not using the names of those bits? # Section 2.4 and section 5.9 I am really puzzled by this section: what is the purpose of it ? It seems to be a CBOR encoding of IEEE OUI/address/identifier so really a CBOR document. Which document specifies the TBD1 and TBD2 in this section ? # Section 3 I like the added pieces of information as well as the change of the flow. But, in ` after the MAC destination and source (or after a tag)` the word "tag" is used *before* its definition ☹ Is the order of source & destination MAC addresses correct ? I.e., destination MAC address should be before the source MAC address, isn't it? # Section 5 Does "Informational" need to be capitalized in ` IANA web page has Informational lists` ? # Section 5.1 Where are the sizes of small/medium defined (e.g., for "medium-size assignments") ? # Section 5.3 A previous section states that all reference to RFC 7042 must be replaced and table 3 contains RFC 7042 Table 4: I think that the vertical bar (the pipe '|') at the left of RRTYPE Code should be removed. # Section 5.5 I find the location of this section in the flow a little weird. Should it be moved at the end ? Did IANA make a review of this important part ? # Section 5.9 See above my comments about the usefulness of the CBOR. Also, specify the exact registry name. _______________________________________________ Int-area mailing list Int-area@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/int-area
