Hello Thanks for your suggestions, I incorporated these in version 9 of the document.
Thanks Hooman -----Original Message----- From: Mallory Knodel via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> Sent: Wednesday, October 23, 2024 1:12 AM To: gen-art@ietf.org Cc: draft-ietf-pim-light....@ietf.org; last-c...@ietf.org; p...@ietf.org Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pim-light-08 CAUTION: This is an external email. Please be very careful when clicking links or opening attachments. See the URL nok.it/ext for additional information. Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-pim-light-?? Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review Date: 2024-10-22 IETF LC End Date: 2024-10-18 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Thanks very much for this concise draft on PIM Light. Major issues: None Minor issues: See nits for readability. Nits/editorial comments: My comments are only focused on the readability of this document. Here are some fixes: * intro: include section number, "as explained further in this document" * intro: expand acronym on first use (it's in section 2.1 instead, "PIM-SM protocol including PIM-SSM as per" * section 3, perhaps indicate that the following subsections define those very specific scenarios and whether there could be more or not by saying "only", "Due to these constraints, a PLI should be deployed in very specific scenarios." * 3.2: spf has not yet been expanded in this document, "to the source using SPF with post-processing as described in" * 3.4: bfd has not yet been expanded in this document, "PIM Light is configured on can be protected via BFD or similar technology" _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list -- gen-art@ietf.org To unsubscribe send an email to gen-art-le...@ietf.org
