Dan, thank you for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot for this document.
Lars > On 2022-5-6, at 12:27, Dan Romascanu via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> wrote: > > Reviewer: Dan Romascanu > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-lamps-cmp-algorithms-12 > Reviewer: Dan Romascanu > Review Date: 2022-05-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2022-05-11 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: > > Ready with nits. > > This document updates RFC 4210 describing the conventions for using concrete > cryptographic algorithms with the Certificate Management Protocol (CMP), which > is used to enroll and further manage the lifecycle of X.509 certificates. Its > reading requires expertise and familiarity with previously published > documents. > The document is ready. I pointed to a few nits, most of them improvements on > readability and orientation. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > > 1. It would be useful to provide references for terms at first occurrence. For > example Section 2 directly mentions OOBCertHash, CertStatus, Challenge, > PBMParameter, DHBMParameter, etc. without providing a reference. > > 2. Section 2.2 - provide reference for X.509 at first occurrence (probably > [RFC4210]) > > 3. For clarity and in order to avoid confusions it would be useful to expand > MAC > > 4. For clarity it would be useful to position Table 3 to start at top of the > page to avoid split at printing > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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