On 24 Apr 2021, at 17:38, John C Klensin wrote:
--On Saturday, April 24, 2021 14:33 -0700 Pete Resnick via
Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> wrote:
Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review result: Ready with Issues
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Nits/editorial comments:
In section 4.3:
In several response code definitions:
The token used MUST be any token that was received in a
request using the same Request-Tag.
That doesn't really parse well. I think you either mean "The
token used MUST be a token" or you mean "The token used can be
any token".
If the first meaning is intended, isn't that tautologically
true? If the token used is not a token, what would it be?
You need to put it in the context of the example give. It could be:
The token used MUST be a token that was received in a
request using the same Request-Tag.
which means it can't be a token with a different Request-Tag, or it
could be:
The token used can be any token that was received in a
request using the same Request-Tag.
which means that there might be different tokens that use the same
Request-Tag, but you can use any of them.
pr
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