Russ, thanks for your review. Jorge, thanks for responding. I entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Jan 4, 2021, at 10:52 AM, Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View) > <jorge.raba...@nokia.com> wrote: > > Hi Russ, > > Thank you for the review! > Please see my comments in-line with [jorge]. > > Thanks again! > Jorge > > From: BESS <bess-boun...@ietf.org <mailto:bess-boun...@ietf.org>> on behalf > of Russ Housley via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org <mailto:nore...@ietf.org>> > Date: Friday, December 4, 2020 at 10:00 PM > To: gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org> <gen-art@ietf.org > <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>> > Cc: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd....@ietf.org > <mailto:draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd....@ietf.org> > <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd....@ietf.org > <mailto:draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd....@ietf.org>>, b...@ietf.org > <mailto:b...@ietf.org> <b...@ietf.org <mailto:b...@ietf.org>>, > last-c...@ietf.org <mailto:last-c...@ietf.org> <last-c...@ietf.org > <mailto:last-c...@ietf.org>> > Subject: [bess] Genart last call review of > draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09 > > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review result: Almost Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>>. > > Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2020-12-04 > IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-15 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > > Summary: Almost Ready > > > Major Concerns: > > There is a normative downward reference to Informational RFC 6820. > It looks to me like this should be an informative reference. > [jorge] agreed. Changed. > > > > Minor Concerns: > > The Abstract seems very long. I suggest: > > This document describes the EVPN Proxy-ARP/ND function, augmented > by the capability of the ARP/ND Extended Community. Together, > these help operators of Internet Exchange Points (IXPs), Data > Centers (DCs), and other networks deal with IPv4 and IPv6 address > resolution issues associated with large Broadcast Domains (DBs) by > reducing and even suppressing the flooding produced by address > resolution in the EVPN network. > [jorge] ok, changed based on your suggestion. > > > Nits: > > When there is a line break in the middle of "->", it is quite difficult > to read. I hope there is a way to make the hyphen non-breaking. > > s2.2: s/devices and therefore floods/devices, and therefore, floods/ > > s2.2: s/messages, however ARP/messages; however, ARP/ > > s6.5: s/IXP's peering network space/IXP peering network space/ > > s7: s/flooded, however the/flooded; however, the/ > > s7: s/will definitely protect/protects/ > [jorge] done all the above, thanks. > > > > IDnits reports: > > == The 'Updates: ' line in the draft header should list only the _numbers_ > of the RFCs which will be updated by this document (if approved); it > should not include the word 'RFC' in the list. > [jorge] done, thanks. > > > > _______________________________________________ > BESS mailing list > b...@ietf.org <mailto:b...@ietf.org> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess > <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess>_______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:Gen-art@ietf.org> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art>
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